do you know my name

tell me what your feeling

am I in your thoughts?

do you know what i'm thinking

do you know my name

 

I notice when you walk by

the way your face always lights up

am I just another person

do you see me as a friend

 

would you hold my hand one day

or am I just one more

do those perfect eyes ever see me

or should i just head for the door

 

 

Reviews

[quinfinn]

love those encounters which leave you asking all these questions, though probably only in your mind and perhaps the heart, still, it is a real and tangible anguish...all those chance encounters are so iffy...sometimes you just have to reach out and try, well done!

[Adri Moolman]

thanks

[Atthis Rose]

Kieth's got a point

[Keith LaFountaine]

Good job, I can sense your style from the last few poems I've read from you.

The only thing I noticed is that you have one question mark in the first stanza, but then you don't use punctuation marks throughout the rest of the piece. I would say stick to one or the other (punctuation or no punctuation) as it feels odd to have one punctuation mark and then nothing else for the rest of the pome.

[Adri Moolman]

thanks

[NITHIN PURPLE]

kip write.....

[whitefang311]

Nice Poem and yes

[Adri Moolman]

thanks

[Will]

I feel like this waaaay more often than I think I should. You've captures the emotions of those passing encounters beautifully, and I love how you portray that feeling of being unsure. Great job :)

[Adri Moolman]

thank u

[Baby Ricochet]

Friendship, doubt and longing. Nice poem

[Adri Moolman]

thank u

[Shelley Wollstonecraft]

i love this one very much :D
omg
i´m speechless :O

[Adri Moolman]

thank u