Ginger snaps

This is just a poem for a contest I did not choose the topic to write on the moderator of the contest did. So give me your opinion but don't be to harsh.

 

 

 

 

 

 We said that we would be together forever

 but now i don't think you really mean it. you say that you take up for me 

when you are only looking out for what you want deep inside. We said that we wouldn't be cursed but you had to mess that up,  and conform to the rest of society. You with you're beautiful self and me just plain. If I could talk to you now I would tell you that I hate you and you don't matter no one will miss you now that you are no more!!! Finally you got what you wished for.

Reviews

[1809 Black Plague Decem..]

wowsers, I love it, it brings out the whole aspect and emotion of the movie,
great write! --mishel

[Girlintheworld]

I think you did a really good job on this poem aside from the fact that you did not choose the subject. The thing I like most about it, is that it gives the reader the feeling that these are thoughts not spoken word like perhaps you are deciding what exactly you might say to a person in a situation before actually saying it aloud.

Just a couple of suggestions for editing: You with *your* beautiful self and me just plain.

If I could talk to you now, I would tell you that I hate you and you don't matter. No one will miss you now that you are no more!!!

[Tai-San]

I think this is awsomely good! Keep writing!

[Hot-N-Cold_17]

Well I really didn't care much for it. The only reason that I wrote it is for a contest but thanks for the review guys.

[After the Blackbird Sin..]

Kind of has a rambling, desperate feel to it. Not too bad.

[Rebecca Rogers]

I don't write poems, but I think the lines could be breaked better.

It's a cute poem though.