Lifeless

Your so lifeless, sad and in a mess.

  My creators agree with me, I'm sorry if I smothered you...

 Some times I wish i stayed inside...my mother...never to come out...

  I'm wasted losing time, but your so lifeless, gone never to be seen, I'm sorry if i smothered you. I wont all that is not mine, i want him but were not right, in the darkness i will meet my creators and they will all agree that i'm a suffacator...I should go know quitly for my bones have found a place to lay down and sleep.

   Your so lifeless, I'm sorry if i smothered you...                                                   

Author's Note

please ignore spelling grammer

Reviews

[ATG]

Despite the sad subject matter, it was a very good poem. Yes there were a few minor spelling errors, but nothing too bad. Overall, it was a good read.

[Patrick Henry]

It's a great poem. It is so slow and deliberate in pain and accepting responsibility for many a year spent in affecting those around the character. "Sometimes I wish I stayed inside....my mother"..... that part confused me. I didn't know if it was meant to sound like punishing the mother or what. In the end I'm wondering who actually died, and if the one who thinks they smother, is the one saying goodbye!! Beautiful Angelove. xoxo -Mark

[axel]

nice poem

[Keith]

I read this piece three times because I got two different tales out it. The first was the remorseful lament of a former lover acknowledging failures in an ended relationship.
The second tale is the guilty plea of a murderer seeking the forgiveness of their victim.
It sort of made for a wild ride in reading for me. Please let me know what the story truly is.

[Angelove]

i based it off a song, i thinks its about a love story idk