STMC

 Who knows what are mind have control of
How do we know if we have our hands on them
When everything we see if a fake
Its fake because its what they want us to see

Watching T.V is just an illusion
Looking at a computer screen...
It's just an illusion
Never knowing what's real or not

But we can't not make them control our minds
They watch, listen, and see us every day
Controlling us...

But never fail the test that lays in front
So just to warn you be careful of you surroundings
watch everything
And protect yourself in anyway

This isn't just some poem this is what goes on every day
So no mean comments, i know they are reading
as i write this
I'm only 14 and i know you make think i'm crazy
but i tell you i'm not.....

Reviews

[MoriartyMesa]

What I like about this is the feeling and underline emotion is not forced. You made an interesting case and I think this might be more than a passing a thought,A deep thinker and person to take note of.

[Angelove]

It is, i think all the other reviews aren't thinking that it isn't true but it is...every word. The government has this kind of control, this kind of electronics

[Owlgirl]

Food for thought, great writing, this definetly makes the reader think.

[axel]

nice poem but abit more like warning note,good write up

[Keith]

This is a simple yet haunting piece. We never do really know who is watching each and every word we type. It is spooky just to consider the possibilities.

Here are a few things you may wish to address:
Who knows what are(our) mind(s) have control of
Its(It's) fake because its(it's) what they want us to see
I'm only 14 and i(I) know you make(may) think i'm crazy
but i(I) tell you i'm(I'm) not.....

Nicely done. And thank you for making me nervous now :)
Note to people watching : See how nice I am! Please remember that.