Definition in the Ability to Remember Line

I wrote this when I was kind of in a bad place about life. Its about my experience in acting.

How did I get so scared of everyone?
It could have been the backstage fun but on stage it might just be me,

How did I become such a good little actress?

All the lies and break downs couldn't get me past this urgent need to be free,

Shakespeare might've posed the right question,

To be or not to be,

But I'll pose a few more questions,

Does all this define me?

Doth this world lack what I need to sustain my bodies' posture?

Do these eyes truly see?

Hath these truths past a reasonable factor?

Do these lines define me?

Define me, define me,

How did I get so good at remembering?

When before I couldn't even remember my own name,

How did my life become such a farce,

The satires reclaimed its art in all the movements I make,

Dancing little fakes,

Shakespeare might've posed the right question,

To be or not to be,

But I'll pose a few more questions,

Does all this define me?

 

Doth this world lack what I need to sustain my bodies' posture?

Do these eyes truly see?

Hath these truths past a reasonable factor?

Do these lines define me?

Define me, define me,

Helena's desperation couldn't get me down,

Beatrice's pride couldn't hold me up,

Kate's wild heart wasn't in me,

But I don't understand all the fuss,

If you can act it- you should get it,

If you can lie- you should cry,

If you can change it- just forget it,

If you can try- go girl- try,

 

Doth this world lack what I need to sustain my bodies' posture?

Do these eyes truly see?

Hath these truths past a reasonable factor?

Do these lines define me?

Define me, define me….

Author's Note

I wrote this song awhile ago. I had been acting alot and I was having trouble finding myself in the characters that I played and liking who I was. So, I wrote this. It's an accoustic song, but it needs a lot of work. Please tell me what might be a good fix.

Reviews

[The Ponderings of Bella]

well I am not going to tell you what will be a good fix .... but I will tell you that I like this song and it is very well written ..... it doesn't jump around all over the place and it flows well ... which it good ig you are writing a song .... do you have any music to it because I think it good and you should def try and make it a full fledged song :) ..... good job ..... although I have to say I am not sure about the haths and the doths .... I don't know if that would work in a song ...... I guess it all depends on what type of song it is....... but for the most part I think it is def song material :)

[Ed Rector]

to make this into lyrics... or a poetic song or w/e you call it much will be needed to be done to the meter of it. songs and lyrics tend to be in intervals of 2,4,6,8 and so on and you have many stanzas that are unequal... many things will have to be considered to eliminate certain phrases and words.. either that or more will need to be added...