I'll wait

poem written for a contest. wish me luck!

i'll wait

i'll wait aslong as it takes

to hear your sweet voice again

to feel your hands warm in mine

to feel our fingers intertwine

to stand togethor lost in time

as long as i can

forever

i'll wait for your sweet lips

pursed when you're angry

at ease when you're not

i'l stare at them when not mid-kiss

and crave more during

always

i'll wait for you to run your fingers through my hair

and stroke me lovingly if you dare

our troubles will simply dissapear

if you will only stay right here

beside me

day and night

forever

always

*I'll wait*

Author's Note

i want everyone to look this over and tell me what you think.
it's for my first Writer;s Cafe contest:)

Reviews

[Raccoony]

This is such a beautiful piece... It really makes me miss the feeling of enrapturing myself in a sweet hug and kiss. ...I hope my "male" comes in soon. teehee ;} [I only found one small typo"Dissapear" needs to be -> *Disappear.] Keep up the fabulous work, dollin'.

[Megara]

thanks doll;)

[esperanza]

Great poem =)

[Megara]

thank you:)

[esperanza]

Welcome.

[Faolan]

Great!

[Megara]

Thanks:)

[PurpleQuartz]

Brilliant.

[Megara]

Thank you:)

[the raven's scream]

I like this poem very much, but do not wait for to long, it might be a waste of time... Just a little advice ;)

[Megara]

Thank you:)

[Pankaj Lohia]

raven's scream.. how long would u wait for ? just asking for a reason

[the raven's scream]

It would depend on the possible chance you get to fulfill your waitings and dreams of, in this case, that person she waits for...

[the raven's scream]

And I do know how desperate falling in love sometimes feels like...What do you think?

[Pankaj Lohia]

I've been waitin for someone for over a month.. I have no idea what's going on in her mind... I don't know what to do.. It feels so restless.. Can't leave either

[the raven's scream]

You shouldn't leave her..You shouldn't try to forget her.. It would feel wrong, trying to forget her, if you're not be able to forget, then you love, but that doesn't mean she's worth it...It seems hard, but take the initiative and find out...:)

[Pankaj Lohia]

Can I msg u on this thing?

[quinfinn]

this is very good. it literally sings itself to the reader with the sweetness of longing and love. your English is very good. no major errors, and the minor spelling errors are negligible, so i wouldn't be too concerned with them. you do have spell check available on your pc right? it would help you a lot. very nice poem, Megara, i am impressed.

[Megara]

It means a lot to me that you think my english is getting better,that is the reason i joined this website in the first place.as for the spelling i do not have auto correct and Thank you for your review:)

[CreativeCookie]

Aw...this is so sweet! It's also a really good write!
Love,
CreativeCookie

[Megara]

Thank you:)

[Hatchling]

Nice write

[Megara]

Thank you:)
it is always nice to get reviews from new people.

[Hatchling]

you're welcome

[steppenwolf]

It has a nice haunting feeling and I like the way you used rhyming at certain places.
Good luck with the contest.

[Megara]

Thank you:)

[.......]

This is very well expressed, the feelings are wonderful but yet sad. Wonderful write : )

[Megara]

thanks:)