Looking at You

Looking at you I see it all

Every joy, every downfall

Listening to you I hear it all

Your sad and broken call

If you let me speak

And stop making me out 

As being so weak

Then we can talk it through

The past and present

The me and you

Let me see

What you've been hiding

Deep inside I know

How you feel and it's tiring

Let me help you up

I can't just let you give up

Looking at you I see it

You're broken and defeated

Listening to you I hear it

In the past you've been beaten

If you let me, I could try

Because it kills me

To let you sit and cry

If you hear me out

I can save you 

From this dark and deadly cloud

Then we can talk it through

The past and present

The me and you

Reviews

[emipoemi]

This is well written and well thought-out! A rhyme scheme and musicality that.....I'm simply at a loss for words at how to even describe it. It's above all a relatable subject, and had moved me. Those last three lines (and the fact that they're which repeat) simply got to me. Well done!

[CLBombay]

I really enjoyed the "From this dark and deadly cloud
Then we can talk it through
The past and present
The me and you"..... Definitely gives a clear and crisp ending. I also like how the poem is vague about what exactly is making this person upset - the reader knows it has something to do with the past relationship of some sort, but other than that, we are unsure, which then creates interest. Good job!