Vapour

I love her till the end of time drains my very life, only to find her slipping trough my fingers again. Will she vaporize before my love can reach her heart?

Vapour

Forever I run, 

But an end, 

Will it come?

Why are you so f*****g stellar…?

Is it because I feel that you are the one, 

But why do they want me to forget where I am after?

Is it because my love doesn't make sense…?

It is not desire but me who makes me pretense, 

A lie covered by my wavering heart, 

For it feels that it is time to part…

I have no intention to part, for I have not even taken a start, 

But there are times when I can’t even tell my feelings apart.

People may be strong, but manipulation is stronger, 

For manipulation is the fated bender.

Have people ever told you to love...?

Is it because they were hinted from above…?

I had times where I couldn't even find my heart, 

For it was covered by my own darkness, 

But why is my darkness still afraid of her light…?

This must be the time, for my darkness to depart…

It is time to divert of my past axis!

But why am I still falling away? 

Can’t remember the beginning of my fall, only the end.

When will the time come, to say my ave?

Or am I to keep falling, becoming only a fraction..?

But while I am falling down with no end in sight...

Promise to stay with me,

For my only wish is for us to be!

Love is a burden that one must carry,

For our journey is to see us tarry.

I have already dreamed of entwining in your roots, 

But in the end, it was only my dream which transmutes….

For the life of my future self is still the same,

Is live only all but just a simple game…?

You have now felt my touch, but it is still not enough, 

For a maiden’s heart is unquestionably tough.

And I fear that you will slowly fade away, 

Vaporizing and left for only but the wind to sway…

©Mitchell Samuël Gordon

Author's Note

I do not own this image: http://len-yan.deviantart.com/art/it-s-coming-171634944
I have chosen to use a vulgar word, for my emotions were uncapped and the only way to express them was by using that word. For the one I love is my Eva and my dream is to become her Adam!

Reviews

[Hakim]

Great poem, I enjoyed the story behind it. MAKE YOUR MOVE BRO!!
The longer you wait, the more time you take away from being in a relationship with her!
Watch that Shia LaBoeuf motivational video on youtube.
heres the link
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ZXsQAXx_ao0

[Nightfeather]

Thank you. The video was very helpful and I will ask her for the Christmas ball (party) on my school in the not so distant future, I hope she will say yes :3

[Tomoe Tellez]

Oh my gosh, this is very beautiful! I love long poems like this one. They tell great stories and this contains the heart of a man who loves deeply.

[Nightfeather]

Thank you for your kind words and I am really glad that you enjoyed this poem :)

[PoeticChico]

This is by far one of my favorite poems, Ever. Period. You are very talented and I love the way you play with words, so much emotion, so much sorrow... thank you for writing this!

[Nightfeather]

Thank you my friend, once again you made my day :D

[PoeticChico]

No problem! :)

[JMKane117]

Vapour is such a powerful word on its own and you made it even stronger. Enhancing the impact of a single word like that is the sign of an excellent writer!

[Nightfeather]

Thank you. Your words have made my sun shine even more brightly :)

[Amy R]

this is an amazing poem!!!
loved it, thanks for sharing.

[Nightfeather]

Thank you :)

[~]

Unrequited love is the most inspirational of them all, for pain makes music.
i enjoyed this piece. :D

[Nightfeather]

Thank you. You are right, pain makes music. For one cannot obtain something without sacrifice :)

[~]

Indeed, and thus many lose in lack of bravery. :D

[Nightfeather]

Exactly :D

[YouTube Converter]

Very well written. Beautiful.

[Nightfeather]

Thank you :)

[𝐋.𝐂.]

Wow...Wish I can write like this someday...

I'm curious, why did you chose the word "vaporize" ?

[Nightfeather]

Thank you, I feel flattered by your graceful words and I shall tell you the reason of including the word vaporize in my poem. I have always felt that I was chasing my love without even gaining any progress. It felt like chasing after a riding a bus while on foot, no hope and no progress. I am friends with the girl I love but I fear that if I don't tell her how I feel and saying that I love her, time will go on and she will eventually fade away in my life, maybe she falls in love with someone else and then I lose her forever. She will 'vaporize' from my existence and is left for only but the wind (other man) to sway. That's is the reason why I choose to use that word.

No one on this world is born without talent, for even the ones with the smallest existence, can be the one with the greatest talents, for I feel that you have talent and must never give up on writing. Writing is love, writing is life :)

[𝐋.𝐂.]

I see...
You should show this poem to her, and she know how you feel about her~~

read moreI see...
You should show this poem to her, and she know how you feel about her~~

Also, I said '"Wish I can write like this someday..."⬅ I because I'm a esl 🙂, so it's hard for me to write poems. I like the words you use to describe your feelings.

[Nightfeather]

You're right. I will show her this poem when I feel ready to make a new start in my life :)

[𝐋.𝐂.]

It's important to express your self, and let others to know how you feel. You can do this~ :)

[Nightfeather]

Thank you, I shall never forget your kind words :)