The Indiviualists' Armageddon

Darkness used to be comforting.

 

 

I'm severed from precious things.

My heart is bound by iron rings.

That's when the daunting temptress sings,

Of a paradise where darkness reigns.

 

From all love, these bonds have broken.

These inflamed words melt the chains.

I care not for material tokens.

My Torn-Out love is replaced with pain.

 

A gaping wound upon my chest,

With inky darkness filled.

I am weary, but take no rest.

All is broken but the power of will.

 

I hunger, but do not eat.

I am hurt, but I am not beat.

Although it is true, that I am stronger than some,

Even a hero can be numb.

 

This darkness surrounds me.

I know I can't turn back.

An endless dark ocean confounds me.

I am thrashed by waves of black.

 

I'm starting to doubt this story.

Could I have been wrong?

Might I have turned away form days of glory

To follow a Sirens' song?

 

My body starts to struggle.

My mind begins to fight.

My screams echo in the rubble,

As I'm torn away from the light.

 

As I'm dragged down deeper,

I see no escape.

I feel like a solidary sleeper,

Whose alarm came just too late.

 

My life is stripped away.

I have nothing left.

Nothing to do, Nothing to say,

This Nothing fills the whole in my chest.

 

My spirit is shattered.

The pieces fly to the winds.

All my busted seams are tattered

I shall never be whole again.

 

Author's Note

The sadness in my soul surrounds me.

Reviews

[CourtNny]

This poem was beautiful!!!
I could seriously feel your pain, hatred towards oneself and heartache! I really, really, immensely enjoyed this! I cannot find the words to express or explain my feelings towards this poem as to where you would understand how much I enjoyed this read. You have a great way with words...thank you.

[Desire Like Sun The Eve..]

This is a very good read. Hun, you never cease to amaze me with your writing. I know it has taken me a while to get on here and look at my read requests, but it is worth it. =)

[Legion]

You will be. Time is the great healer. I know that sounds cliche, but it is also true. I read your bio as well as this piece. I have a similar past from long ago and believe me when I tell you it will pass. The piece is truly a dark mirror for me. I see myself back then in what you have written. It is a good piece for the message it presents. It does need corrective action as far as structure and grammar are concerned, but that will come with time as you progress as a writer. I am over twice your age now and still have trouble sometimes even though I have been writing since I was a pre-teen. Keep 'em coming.

[The White Wolf]

I have to tell you, this poem speaks to me on a very deep level. I have found myself feeling the same emotions presented from time to time. I very much liked the line "even a hero can be numb"..it was an eloquent thought that few of us dare to ponder. Even the strongest among us have our weak moments. Very nicely written.

[Alexander]

This one is AMAZING. Very good word choice; a nice flow is created. The first stanza is really great.

[CD]

very touching,but dark.u r a very talented writer!!!!keep it up :)

[Seriana]

Oooohh, this is painfully sad. Yet, there is comfort in the dark. But, there is also light there that will always penetrate the darkness. You know, I read a funny this morning, I shall pass it along. It's always darkest right before it goes pitch black! Ha! Ok, so it's not that funny, but this piece reminded me of that. You've done a fabulous job of expression here. Wonderful. :)

[After the Blackbird Sin..]

Yeah, I guess it does. That is very dark. But the rhyme scheme is very simple. So I think the poem is dark but not deep.