Rose

A poem a wrote about 6 months ago...Its Based very very losely on my little cousin.

Finding it hard to breathe

My life is ending tonight

I can feel it:

Its there lurking there beneath my breast

It’s the darkness of my heart

The words you carved into my mind

You’re worthless

No one needs you

I’m lost again

Finding it hard to breathe

My life is ending tonight

I feel them:

Your hands across my face

Your wet lips against my skin

Your intentions to use me

Use me until I’m empty and barren

Use me until my body is nothing but a shell

Use me until my eyes have no light

Use me until I’m become your trophy

Until I’m nothing but the foolish girl under your spell

I’m just the girl you stole the life from

My name is Rose

These are the words that haunted me

You are weak and I am strong

You are wrong and I am right

You are mine

My name is Rose

These are the last things I felt

Your hand across my face

Your fingers ripping at my clothes

You’re your nails cutting into my skin

My soul being ripped from my body

There I lie

Lifeless on your arms

I hear you say

“Good bye Rose”

Reviews

[Chelsea Schermerhorn]

Oh wow....very very powerful poem. Somehow, tragedy holds such power. I can barely keep from crying. It makes me believe you have lived through that situation, and that is the gift. By living through your words, you bring the words to life for the reader, which is the priceless value of writing. Very, very good poem.

[Monday Parker]

Haunting. This is a great poem...Leaving everyone who reads it with a some what raped feeling... tragic and beautifully writen.

[Adrian K. Smith]

I had to go smoke a cig after reading this, to gather my thoughts. I was hit by the tragedy of this as it could apply to several situations. It fills you with an epic sadness . . . but that sadness is soon replaced by a livid rage.

[These Haunted Hallways]

Very well done! Filled with extreme emotions, and I felt every word. Excellent job with this!

B.A.

[Vampire]

Wow, that was really good, it was so strongly written, and it had a lot of feeling to it, i've never read a poem like that, and i truly mean that, very well written :)