A LONELY MAN ON LOVE, IN DEATH

I'm too dead for love

But if you run

You just might catch

That lie that I've chased

All my life.

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Reviews

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Wow, it's short but yet so meaningful! A true writer can use a few words or lines to cross a powerful message by his audience. I'm glad that I read this, because it has me thinking about a lot of things dealing with love. It was such a pleasure reading this. I agree with the other comments that the fading of the words makes it more creative and genius. You done an excellent job with this regardless! :)

Ashley Rivers--Dream BIG and you'll win BIG:)

[Miguel]

Thank you, Ashley. :)
I'm happy this piece spoke to you. I like to think that it makes up for its lack in length with its message - whether it is the message I intended it to have or the message the reader makes for it. :)

Appreciate your review! And glad you enjoyed reading.

~Miguel

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

You're welcome :) and yes of course! It really does make up for its length. It's a wonderful piece altogether, Miguel.

[Brielle Cartny]

Very Very sad,but i think i get the deeper meanings.

[Miguel]

It's good to see that somebody does. :) Thanks for the review, Brielle; I really appreciate it. I've been meaning to get around to reviewing more of your work for a long time now, but school for me right now is DEATH. :(
SOON! Haha :)

Cheers,
Miguel

[Brielle Cartny]

No problem! Have a great night!

[Harley (arbiter)]

Well this. This was mind blowing! I loved it! Short but with so muh meaning and the fade just blew it over the top! Great job!

[Miguel]

Aw thanks, Harley :) Glad you like it!

[C.A. Lucas]

The gradual faintness adds a lot of meaning. Make sure your other poems are not supported by font, though. I like the idea, as long as this is the first time you've used it

[Miguel]

Yes, it is, thank you :)

[Eternal Poet]

Brilliant, how you have faded the words seems love is within then again, beyond reach, and the lie still remains, utterly fantastic it's like one of those "it's a well known saying" ....... Chance and maybe.

[Miguel]

Thank you! ^u^

[nigrum homonculus]

this is really good! the way you faded out with the words was genius. well done man!

[Miguel]

Thanks, Phill :) glad you thought the fading was effective.

[SmileBig :)]

love this so much! its so short, but its oh so amazing. emotions flowing out ever so nicely, and the meaning portrayed! Well done.

[Miguel]

Thank you, Missy. :) Really glad you like it!

[Speak in Silence]

I love the way the words fade out. I love this in general :)

[Miguel]

Aw thanks! :)

Glad you liked it (I'm quite proud of the fading, to be perfectly honest)! :P

[Speak in Silence]

You're always welcome :) You should be proud it's great! :)

[Gothic Girl]

love the emotions going on there. :) from the start, sadness was already portrayed. it was somehow sadder as I read through the whole poem. great job! :))

[Miguel]

Salamat! :)

I'm glad I was able to capture that feeling of sadness. Happy you like it.

[Gothic Girl]

Walang anuman! i just don't like it. i love it. :)

[Fae]

I really love the way this is layed out to really set the poem's mood, and really whatever people will remember if you said this to them. They will remember the first thing they hear: I'm too dead for love. They will think that you alone are too dead for love. Only a small amount of people will remember the deep meaning after you have said those words: But if you run You might catch That lie that I've chased All my life. Very well done, and a very good metaphor used. Really nice poem, I'd rate it 100/100

[Miguel]

Thank you for your input, Fae. :)

I'm glad you like it!