I WILL WAIT FOR YOU LOVE

Just a short poem i wrote when i was randomly fooling around ! every single person can relate to this ! That's what i want my poems to achieve ! :)

Every single day your heart twitches 
For that special someone, 
You camouflage your love with hatred 
But buried deep beneath in your heart 
Is the soul of the other one waiting
To be loved by you,now and forever.

                                                   Mohammed Sameer 

Reviews

[ChaoticSoul]

I definitely think you captured a moment we can all relate to. Battling with some form of a love/hate relationship, either too scared or unwilling to face the truth of the emotion. If I might make a suggestion, I would consider changing the "U" in the third line to "You." This poem has a sophistication about it that is brought down by the amateur use of "U," and you have obviously demonstrated you possess writing skills above that. So, just a opinion. Very nice writing, though!

[Matthew Smith]

Yup, decent.

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Most feeling write i have read so far...such depth and beauty.