Lonely and Sweet

Another one of those old poems I wrote years ago, stumbled upon, and felt like sharing.

I saw a small girl, with pale, wistful eyes;
Her demeanor was sad, but sweet like a child.
I wished I could help her, wished there was a way;
To make lips to smile, that hadn't that day.
"Dream on friend," I told her, "For dreaming is sweet;
You must feel so alone, with your head on the street."
I knew how it felt, to have loneliness creep
Into her small heart, and plant itself deep.
"So come with me now," I wish I could say,
"To the place where the angels, will comfort you; nay
You shall never grow lonely again,
And your sorrowful eyes shall be cleansed of their pain."

Author's Note

Again, I wrote this one a while back, so all critiques are enjoyed, but I most likely won't really do much to alter it.
. . . Can't even really remember why I wrote it.

Reviews

[Summer D.]

Beautiful! You should definitely write more pieces. Undoubtedly my favorite line was,
"Dream on friend," I told her, "For dreaming is sweet;". Haha, I just might use that theme for another poem... I feel some sort of inspiration coming on but the question is- Will I meet procrastination at the next door? Probably so. Probably so.

Years ago?
My creative writing in particular didn't really reach its potential until 2-3 years ago.
I've always written.. but.. not like this.

Ah, writers envy.
Such a fickle thing.

Wonderful write TS.

YT,

Summer

*100*

[13ReasonsWhy]

This touched my heart deeply.... Absolutly wonderful... My heart reaches out to anyone that is the slightest bit lonely or sad....

[MsMermaid]

You are the Bard
You are the Poet
You know how to rhyme it
You know how to flow it.

Even the anguish you share
Can be soothing,
Describing your pain
While rough waters you're smoothing!

Your gift is a knack
That charms all who read.
With every write
You're planting a seed.
Inspiring others to follow your lead.

[Jasmine Thousand]

It's a beutiful piece! It's quite p oetic, and I like the ryhme scheme.
~Jasmine Thousand~

[Tai Ryens]

Beautiful write, could've used a bit of altering though, just saying. Not much of a problem, just a couple comma's to add, in my opinion. Despite that, it's really a wonderful write! How do you come up with such brilliant things? You must tell me your secret, haha. Just kidding, as always. Great, beautiful, and amazing write!

[Bridget Murphy]

I like it, you're realy good at writing poetry!!!:)