Lies

Lies

I have my rhythm

I follow no chain

Your new joined link

Won't change my ways

I wish what I do

I hide my lies

I bleach my routes

I hide my eyes

I look up

when you look down

I might laugh loud

To hide my frown

What am I

If I am untrue

I've seen your cards

And you lie too

I mind my own

You should too

So why am I

No better than you?

Reviews

[MsJewel]

So simple and yet you have shared a wise message. Outstanding message!

:) Julie

[Kianna]

Dear #SecretWriter,

Hello, how are you doing today? I hope all is well with you. I found a bit of free time and saw this poem in my newsfeed. So, I thought I might take a look and see what you have here.

From a far glance, the poem looked way too simple for me, but then as I read it, I grew to love it so much I had to tuck it in my library. I think this poem portrays the darkness I think dwells in everybody. It makes me think of someone who is talking to someone who is looking down on them. With this I can truly relate.

Although, I do think this line was a little odd, "I wish what I do." Shouldn't it be "I do what I wish?" I don't know, but either way I just love the last three stanzas. The question at the end was awesome.

Well done

90/100

Sincerely JazzSoulKeke,

God bless

[A. Amos]

I mind my own
You should too
So why am I
No better than you?

Smart, sharp, wit and simply brilliant poetry. With honest message. Bravo.....

[Samwam]

Lies
I have my rhythm
I follow no chain
Your new joined link
Won't change my ways

I love it. Awesome!

[Sam]

I've seen your cards and you lie too

Excellent.

[Raymond Federle]

Yes excellent word play. This is very good! :)

[My Favorite Writer !]

I loved the last two stanzas. They are very well described. Well done.

[Madison O'Dwyer]

I like how you used a simply rhyme scheme to create an in-depth and questioning poem. The flow and rhythm were flawless :) thanks for sharing.

[Papercut-Sunrays]

I like your play on words here. It had good flow. All round this is a nicely written poem. Well done :)

[Darkgirl]

everybody lies, this is nicely done.