It Would Need To Rain

It would need to rain
for life to remain.
From the sullen clouds above - the pillows
of angels... a hint of white in the gleamy
harmony of blue, keen and sleek, lost in the vastness of gaiety, yet, waiting to be swallowed by the blackness.
To the salty drops that hang in those
twin balls burrowed into the skull.

There is no end to their descent,
for they are fecund and pure - the incarnate
of pain strewn into the frisky
threads that glide beyond grasp.
Like trees that shed their leaves in autumn
knowing fully well that spring will bring them back,
Or like a python that crawls out of its skin, so that its real beauty can be revealed.
Stop them not!
Let them flow!
For, when these bowels have
been emptied of wetness,
Once again, they will know the charm of a smile.

Author's Note

Something I did recently...
What do you think?

Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I liked the way this conveys to the reader...and the words give much in the lines...the structure of some of your lines seems to drift off the page...but I believe you can change those areas...as for the write itself presents a well penned narrative...

[Shaquana Adams]

I really liked you use of imagery and words. Good job :)

[J. Alfred Prufrock]

I really enjoyed this one. very well constructed, loved the vivid imagery. you have a very thoughful spirit.

I read your "about" me; as you are 18 i doubt you are the person i am remembering from several years ago, you would have only been 11 or so when i was on this site in 2006 . lol i did see you were into reggae. i use to live on St. Criox which has some of the best reggae in the world, or at least it use to. Best time of my life.

anyway, take care i'll read more of you as it apears on the site

prufock

[Rossen]

I like that you embrace the duality and rebirth of each moment...
thumbs up, 100/100

[Dave]

A million tthanks Rossen

[Lora King]

Well, my friend, beautiful is what I say... favorite line being...
"Or like a python that crawls out of its skin, so that its real beauty can be revealed."
Absolutely beautiful.... Keep up the good work.

[Dave]

Thanks alot Lora!