a jungle of feelings

i wish youd understand

you cant blame me forever

i wish youd understand

its my past leave it there

you act like back then

when my life was full of hate

you act like it was my fault

but it wasnt

i feel like no matter

what i do ill never be good enough

for you

i feel like you want her

not me anymore

i wish youd understand

how much i need you

here with me

and when i cant be with you

how bad it hurts me

i feel like even though

everything is kind of great

that here soon everything

will come crashing down

sometimes i think its too good to be true

and i think what if you leave me

i love you with all my heart

and thats how its always going to be

i will never let go of all these wonderful memories

you left me

you see in my head

i have these doubts

that what if

this what if that

but in my heart

i think not him

so please dont hurt me

 

you have already got

into my heart

my soul

and my mind

dont hurt me

thats all im asking

is for a chance

to prove to you

im better than her

Author's Note

yeah sorry, kind of got carried away and i just started writing down exactly what i feel like inside, please tell me truthfully what you think, i can handle the critizism. it doesnt ryhme but oh well

Reviews

[FANTASYKNIGHT]

A poem doesn't nessearily have to rhyme, like those children 'fairy tale' poems that sound so perfect over the tongue. A abstract poem tells a better story and can be written much more descriptive. I love abstract poems, and i write alot of them.
Since there's not much rhyming, theres not much to improve, or change because it's a story, and you cant change the story line. So it's fine, it's you, and your feelings in the form of a poem, on the paper.
It's the ink on the paper, and the words in the phrases. It is what it is, and don't change that. abstract poems are the most valuable, and only a good critic can see the true potential in a good abstract poem. I dont know how good a critic i am, but this is a good expression. Though you could have added a bit more feel to it by giving some colourful descriptive words.
"im will never let go of all these"
you know what to change there, lol.
Good one...