I Just Wanna

I just wanna forget.

I'm tired of seeing I'm tired of remembering.

I just want it all to go away because it stays with me too much way too damn much it makes my mind an the sky turn gray I'm tired of it all its like my dreams an painted scenes keep getting thrown away or someone comes to wash it all down the drain I hate it I hate it all I don't want to remember because it hurts to walk it hurts to look an it hurts the most to feel all I ever wanna do is smile and laugh an cry tears of joy in a place where I can be free and close my eyes and drift to dream but it feels like I can't.

Reviews

[Ballpark Frank]

I get this. I want peace. I don't have it. I dream about peace and contentment and love but it often appears out of reach.

[R.M.C]

Life can be stressful and you many want many things, but you may not get many (or any) of them and that can make you frustrated - the frustration comes through really well in your piece. Like I advised on your last piece, I would strongly recommend reformatting this (even more so than your last one due to the length) to make it easier for people to read - if it's not easy to read, then most people won't bother trying. I would also strongly recommend you add some punctuation (and turn your bc into because). A suggestion on what kind of things I mean:

I just wanna forget I'm tired of seeing, of remembering;
I just want it all to go away because it stays with me too much -
It makes my mind and the sky turn gray.
I'm tired of it all; its like my dreams are painted scenes that
Keep getting thrown away or someone comes to wash it all down the drain.
I hate it. I hate it all!
I don't want to remember because it hurts to walk,
It hurts to look and it hurts the most to feel.
All I ever wanna do is smile and laugh and cry tears of joy
In a place where I can be free,
where I can close my eyes and drift away to dream...
But it feels like I can't.