Sweet Tooth

as long as he's sweet enough to bake, my teeth can fall, and ache and break

I have a major sweet tooth,

I mean I'm talking I have a second stomach 

for sweets.

If I had to choose my last meal, 

I'd choose ice cream.

As a pastime snack,

I'd choose a cookie from dairy queen.

I have a major sweet tooth.

Even though I know it's bad for me,

that my teeth could rot

from cavities

I like the taste,

the scent the look

even if the candy

is illiterate and

can't read a book

even if the candy 

doesn't read poems

and can't write 

hooks.

I have a major sweet

tooth.

I know the candy could

ruin my life,

but I like what I like,

so why try to fight?

My dentist will say

"Girl, you have to stop"

But nothing can top

My major sweet tooth.

Author's Note

Mid-class writing poems cuz i'm craving chocolate and caramel

Reviews

[Davidgeo]

This isn't mid class writing, it's better than you think or would have us think you think. Certain kinds of candy give a lot of people herpes.

[maya_online]

I don't know if you were aiming for this, but that might have been the funniest review I've gotten. Herpes, Chlamydia, and HIV, that's why I stick to sugar-free.

[Davidgeo]

You've probably made the right decision. The sugar sweet candy game is a cesspool these days. The mental health crisis has made the dating scene a pit of despair unless you are "obviously" mentally and materially healthy. Yee haw

[maya_online]

Honestly, the colourful packaging can't hide the nutritional facts on the bag, better to just not try at all and be happy

[Davidgeo]

You are not wrong. Until you see it, don't go looking. Most of us are commercials trying to attract something relatively nefarious. (I might be overly cynical, take me 49% seriously)

[maya_online]

Its right to be overly cynical, literal case of better be safer than sorry, lol, I take you completely serious. Dating is like one big joke.

[Davidgeo]

You cannot burn to death if you don't first start the house on fire. We might be in control of less than we think but we do absolutely control some things. Be careful and good luck and never surrender.

[Davidgeo]

... that was not a good reply... people start other people on fire all the time

[maya_online]

yeah I don't think I can survive being on fire, but maybe I'm a superhero in that analogy so...pretty good reply

[Davidgeo]

People don't know... under extreme duress your lower brain takes over. We can do incredible things. The cost is extreme, you take an extreme cortisol bath and then you get a lifetime of PTSD if you live. It's unfortunate but the humans most equipped to deal with this play professional sports or run multi national corporations. Or are serial killers. The people who can turn the lower brain off... it's an evolutionary advantage. People who can write poetry... no one cares about poetry anymore. AI can write a poem in .39 seconds ten times better than all of us combined.

[maya_online]

Yeah, the only difference between us and AI is that there's emotion, theres situations weve been in and for one we know what love is.

[Dave W.]

What a fun read, I feel for your teeth, what out for the cavities........

[maya_online]

Thank you for your review! Glad this could be fun for you~!

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

what a fun little poem. there were multiple lines that made me smile. it is a confession about our guilty pleasures, which most if not all will relate to in some way. 'even if the candy / is illiterate and / can't read a book' is humorous, but there is subtext here too. candy cannot appreciate your passion. just as all vices are inherently empty. that said, it was above all something light and breezy, one that cheers the reader up.

[maya_online]

Exactly! Wanted to take a happier tone, but keep my voice as some would call it, glad it worked out well !

[cain_notfound]

This is literary beauty, the metaphors with the candy being men who you know are bad for you, but still being attracted, the rotting of your teeth and cavities being the broken heart or trust, to the dentist actually being a friend trying to help you, I also think this is almost your way of rewriting "My type". Your sweet tooth is actually the type of man you like, and I remember you saying you didn't like that piece as much, this is something with an upbeat tone with underlying meanings, and it is top tier!

[maya_online]

Glad you read this one ! You're too kind, thank you!

[Franky]

Mmmmmmmm

I love candy. I love chocolate. Yum. Yum. Yum.

I agree totally. I love sugar!!@

[cain_notfound]

Lol, while I'm sure she meant this too, I think she was metaphoring men who were bad for her.