Sweet Tooth

Sweet Tooth

A Poem by maya_online
"

as long as he's sweet enough to bake, my teeth can fall, and ache and break

"
I have a major sweet tooth,
I mean I'm talking I have a second stomach 
for sweets.
If I had to choose my last meal, 
I'd choose ice cream.
As a pastime snack,
I'd choose a cookie from dairy queen.

I have a major sweet tooth.
Even though I know it's bad for me,
that my teeth could rot
from cavities
I like the taste,
the scent the look
even if the candy
is illiterate and
can't read a book
even if the candy 
doesn't read poems
and can't write 
hooks.
I have a major sweet
tooth.

I know the candy could
ruin my life,
but I like what I like,
so why try to fight?
My dentist will say
"Girl, you have to stop"
But nothing can top
My major sweet tooth.

© 2024 maya_online


Author's Note

maya_online
Mid-class writing poems cuz i'm craving chocolate and caramel

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This isn't mid class writing, it's better than you think or would have us think you think. Certain kinds of candy give a lot of people herpes.



Posted 1 Month Ago


maya_online

1 Month Ago

yeah I don't think I can survive being on fire, but maybe I'm a superhero in that analogy so...prett.. read more
Davidgeo

1 Month Ago

People don't know... under extreme duress your lower brain takes over. We can do incredible things.. read more
maya_online

1 Month Ago

Yeah, the only difference between us and AI is that there's emotion, theres situations weve been in .. read more
What a fun read, I feel for your teeth, what out for the cavities........

Posted 1 Month Ago


maya_online

1 Month Ago

Thank you for your review! Glad this could be fun for you~!
what a fun little poem. there were multiple lines that made me smile. it is a confession about our guilty pleasures, which most if not all will relate to in some way. 'even if the candy / is illiterate and / can't read a book' is humorous, but there is subtext here too. candy cannot appreciate your passion. just as all vices are inherently empty. that said, it was above all something light and breezy, one that cheers the reader up.

Posted 1 Month Ago


maya_online

1 Month Ago

Exactly! Wanted to take a happier tone, but keep my voice as some would call it, glad it worked out .. read more
This is literary beauty, the metaphors with the candy being men who you know are bad for you, but still being attracted, the rotting of your teeth and cavities being the broken heart or trust, to the dentist actually being a friend trying to help you, I also think this is almost your way of rewriting "My type". Your sweet tooth is actually the type of man you like, and I remember you saying you didn't like that piece as much, this is something with an upbeat tone with underlying meanings, and it is top tier!

Posted 1 Month Ago


maya_online

1 Month Ago

Glad you read this one ! You're too kind, thank you!
Mmmmmmmm

I love candy. I love chocolate. Yum. Yum. Yum.

I agree totally. I love sugar!!@

Posted 1 Month Ago


cain_notfound

1 Month Ago

Lol, while I'm sure she meant this too, I think she was metaphoring men who were bad for her.

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Added on November 13, 2024
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