what a fun little poem. there were multiple lines that made me smile. it is a confession about our guilty pleasures, which most if not all will relate to in some way. 'even if the candy / is illiterate and / can't read a book' is humorous, but there is subtext here too. candy cannot appreciate your passion. just as all vices are inherently empty. that said, it was above all something light and breezy, one that cheers the reader up.
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Exactly! Wanted to take a happier tone, but keep my voice as some would call it, glad it worked out .. read moreExactly! Wanted to take a happier tone, but keep my voice as some would call it, glad it worked out well !
This is literary beauty, the metaphors with the candy being men who you know are bad for you, but still being attracted, the rotting of your teeth and cavities being the broken heart or trust, to the dentist actually being a friend trying to help you, I also think this is almost your way of rewriting "My type". Your sweet tooth is actually the type of man you like, and I remember you saying you didn't like that piece as much, this is something with an upbeat tone with underlying meanings, and it is top tier!
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Glad you read this one ! You're too kind, thank you!
I'd like to leave my mark somewhere, and hope it matters, maybe my words reach someone, and if they do, then that someone will know I was here.
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