Pain

i think i might do more with this later.

The knife dulls the pain
as the pain dulls the knife

Reviews

[Loner]

You have said immensely by saying this much
only a real heavy metal and philosophical touch
to your words pouring in pain .....

[Alex Crow]

You can always do more with a good thought like this. This really captures the sence of depression and holds it in such a chort poem. But what's wrong with short? NOTHING!!!!

[Max]

that is all good, i might put it all together at some point

[Robert delfuego or Etha..]

And yet life and sorrow sharpen the blade
Bleeding emotions you already start to fade
Losing your self far past numb
But yet you succumb to sorrow
Forever trapped
In the cycle
Of the pain dulling knife
And the knife dulling pain
What you think of this max

[flyingdreams]

knife and pain run an endless loop
in endless loop of knife and pain

[Jock Engelman]

"the bleached white tiles run lines with my pain;
as the fluids of life fall like a game;"

(dont worry i am just happy to help with continuing erika jones' idea, it would be cool for it to be sourced with a link to my profile if you use it though :P )

[Erika Jones]

The crimson tears that fall show my pain
as my pain make the crimson tears fall. :)