First love

Not really a story just something I had in my heart

I looked into her eyes only to be greeted by an endless ocean of beauty so vast that her eyes could not contain it so it had taken over her whole face. Beauty trickled down her lashes drop by drop only to fall into a never ending abyss. Why does she not realise that's its her heart that makes all this beauty so real and memorizing to such an extent that it is beyond the comprehension of the human mind.
Her heart is as big as an ocean it self take a plunge into it and you'll realise it too is vast and is home to many secrets, secrets that only one individual knows and I'm lucky enough to be the one. Why is it? That I want to light up every corner of heart just so that she may not have to face darkness again. Why is it? That I'm willing to burn just so that she see's the world illuminate around her.
When she cares that look of stress in her eyes for someone's well being , that side of her will surely melt the very ground beneath a man's feet just so that he can fall in hell and realise that someone up there is hurting for him. Now she becomes an inspiration a never ending fire burns within his heart pushing him on to escape hell just so that he can get a glimpse of all that beauty all over again.
I'd rather:
Feel her love
Feel her care
Feel her heart
Feel her skin
Feel her hair
Just for a moment than an eternity without it.

Reviews

[Sai]

this is so cute and I can feel the love radiating from these words. My heart beat- I'm going to be a little girl and say that I imagined that a guy was thinking about me like this. haha!

[maverick]

Thank you means a lot to me :p

[kanyinsola okafor]

a lovely piece well composed.

[maverick]

Thank you :)

[Dalton Wagoner]

Dude, this is a beautiful piece of prose. Keep it up!

[maverick]

Thanks for the support :)

[Dalton Wagoner]

Np dude. Just keep on writing! :-)

[Becky]

This is beautiful. So honest and open, I loved it! Great work :)

[maverick]

Thank you :)

[Onyx453]

Just for a moment than an eternity without it
very nice

[Stan Lee]

Nice! I really liked the imagery you have created in this piece.
Well done - keep writing :)

[maverick]

Thank you :) and yeah I will continue

[Mackenzie Knitter]

I loved this, it was so raw, I could feel your emotion, very well done :)

[maverick]

Thank you I'm glad I could make a emotional connection with you . :)

[Ella]

Nicely written. Its full of emotion. I'm glad you can write from the heart it says a lot about you. Overall its a great piece maybe you can turn it into a poem.

[maverick]

Thanks means a lot to me :)
Oh and the poem is a nice idea I'll work on it

[Ella]

Awesome! Give me a heads up when its done.

[Rockel Mansaray]

I could feel the emotion in every word you wrote. I especially like that it's from the guy's perspective. I don't see that a lot. All in all, this is pretty cute. :)

[maverick]

Thank you means a lot to me :)

[Rockel Mansaray]

No problem

[maverick]

So yeah this is my first time posting something on here :)
I'd like to know what you think of my writing :)
And thanks for reading.