Faces

Idk I was kinda bored one day.

As I stand in a crowd,

The faces mean nothing to me.

They all have their own lives; 

But they still mean nothing to me...

 

I no longer notice their looks,

Their “beauty” means nothing to me...

They don’t matter anymore;

Your face is the only one I want to see.

Reviews

[redd Brick Keshner]

There is a depth underlying the simplicity of the words. The poem need not be lengthy to be effective. It said what it had to say and was done with it. Greatly admired.

[Patricia]

I like the change-up at the end. It makes the line stand out, which seems to have been your point. Short and to the point is always good. Hope you keep up the writing even when you aren't bored. Its good stuff.

[Vaishali..^_^]

ah...short and sweet....nice write...!
great work..!

[Bent Dragon (Eric)]

Aww a nice sweet poem. I quite like it.

A couple words of advice though,
after a comma or semi-colon don't capitalize the next line.

If your word processor does that by default then never mind.

I also think it would have sounded neat if you ended the last line with me to keep with the pattern. Something like, Your face is the only one I want near me; or; Your face is the only one I want to see near me.

But that is sort of irrelevant as it is a good poem one way or the other

It nice to see some short poems on here.

-Bent Dragon.

[Fear Corrupts!]

Hmm...
Short & sweet.
The ending was neat, kind of unexpected - I was just thinking that you were heading towards a detached sort of ending.
Good Write.

{ Fear Corrupts! }