Discarded Melodies

I really like this one, I wrote this in my room thinikng of all the lost.

Spoiling, quietly and violently minding me
No way No way to say I like this cold shade
No way I can say I find this song soothing
When the quiet crying still lives behind yellow moons
Suicide hanging on high swinging beams
Rusted to crimson like age thrust through looming graves
Their pretty monuments commemorate the depraved
While the enslaved live on censored pages marked in red
While those quivering bodies sing discarded melodies in their fractured heads
Wile decaying fellows hurl quiet screams while lying in bed
Characters, ghost, spirits claw at their hopeless reds

Reviews

[A Touch of Insanity:)]

Very depressing and kinda creepy.... but I like it

[Krazy On The Outside]

Wow, I really love this one!
The imagery is amazing!
Um, on the second line I think you added an extra No way or if you didn't it should be captalized and it needs a comma after the first no way.