Their Tears

This poem is mainly about the struggles faced by those who experienced great discrimination and the importance of remembering those victims and those who stood up against the wrong doings. Enjoy!

My eyes- they sting with tears
the thought of it,
it drives a stake
straight through my heart

your culture
your heritage
your history
fading away

And soon. Your culture
your heritage 
your history
gone

you do not realize.
how, do you not realize?
the struggles those once faced
so that you, may have the privilege
of what we call life

from all different backgrounds 
no matter who you are
there are struggles
and puddles, of tears
shed for our lives

the shoe prints left on his face,
the terror, burned into hers
the gas filling his lungs
and the bullets piercing their hearts

I ask you, 
as human beings
do we not owe them
to remember those struggles

because you see,
without our past...
how, can we have a future?

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Kara]

I really liked it, kinlow..

here's some stuff i thought of..(cuz i know you know how to use commas..:)

umm..maybe in the first stanza, change the 'the thought of it, it drives a stake through my heart,' to just the thought of it, drives a stake through my heart...

you don't realize instead of you do not realize, a bit wordy...

i LOVE the last stanza, especially...but the whole thing is amazing..very powerful..[and the corrections are just things i would do, you don't have to..]
good job, kinlow..keep it up.

[Hannah Monttkomepy]

I like it Kinlow =D

Umm, I think... to help with the flow (i kept changing it in my mind) you might want to try to emphasize some parts so readers like me can understand the way you wanted it to go.

Also, it triggered emotion, but I think you could trigger more... Like choosing words Poe might've used.... But I don't know, I'm running out of ideas here =D

I do think this is a very nice poem though, and I like the way you set up the stanzas and how you italicized some words.

[Joe]

This is a very good poem. Great rhythm and word choice help it flow quite nicely. This piece really speaks to me. Great job! Keep it up!