Kami: You just blew me away: This poem is unreal. What a deep spiritual, emotional writing. The title is befitting. I will seriously read this again. The world is full of sin, people without humanity, "Thou shalt not Kill", and then all of these magnificent lines - it's amazing.
Scarlet marbles slid off,
their malevolent edges,
the once living with the terrifying,
face of agony,
mouth half-opened,
seemingly a voice unheard,
the miserable soul's final cry,
or simply a saddening scream.
Admiration, shock, speechlessness, fear, rage, hatred.
Kami: I am going to let this sink in and read again; one thing I know for certain is it is phenomenal. Just fabulous writing and I thank you so much. Dale
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
Thank you very much for the wonderful words, Dale! I do feel disappointed when I saw someone I look.. read moreThank you very much for the wonderful words, Dale! I do feel disappointed when I saw someone I looked up to actually fail to do what he was meant to. He was stuck in his own pride and couldn't even teach children the right thing. You are very true, Dale; the world is full of sin. If people do not open up their hearts and take a wider look at the world, corruption just sinks deeper and deeper.
9 Years Ago
My pleasure; you're right....pride can tear a good heart down. And the world is just, just well cra.. read moreMy pleasure; you're right....pride can tear a good heart down. And the world is just, just well crazy.....Dale
This is simply beautiful kami. the thought that you have put in really inspires me.. Karma is one big thing and you dealt very nicely with it. Great job dear :)
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
Thank you very much for reading and leaving such a lovely comment, nazia! I was worried that perhap.. read moreThank you very much for reading and leaving such a lovely comment, nazia! I was worried that perhaps I made the poem too long, thanks for the encouraging words! :D
Kami: You just blew me away: This poem is unreal. What a deep spiritual, emotional writing. The title is befitting. I will seriously read this again. The world is full of sin, people without humanity, "Thou shalt not Kill", and then all of these magnificent lines - it's amazing.
Scarlet marbles slid off,
their malevolent edges,
the once living with the terrifying,
face of agony,
mouth half-opened,
seemingly a voice unheard,
the miserable soul's final cry,
or simply a saddening scream.
Admiration, shock, speechlessness, fear, rage, hatred.
Kami: I am going to let this sink in and read again; one thing I know for certain is it is phenomenal. Just fabulous writing and I thank you so much. Dale
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
9 Years Ago
Thank you very much for the wonderful words, Dale! I do feel disappointed when I saw someone I look.. read moreThank you very much for the wonderful words, Dale! I do feel disappointed when I saw someone I looked up to actually fail to do what he was meant to. He was stuck in his own pride and couldn't even teach children the right thing. You are very true, Dale; the world is full of sin. If people do not open up their hearts and take a wider look at the world, corruption just sinks deeper and deeper.
9 Years Ago
My pleasure; you're right....pride can tear a good heart down. And the world is just, just well cra.. read moreMy pleasure; you're right....pride can tear a good heart down. And the world is just, just well crazy.....Dale
Lots of thoughts are going in this wonderful write. Thought provoking ...Excellent...:)....
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
Thanks a lot for reading, Sami! It was out of random thoughts and I'm glad it turned out to be okay.. read moreThanks a lot for reading, Sami! It was out of random thoughts and I'm glad it turned out to be okay! :D
Well written and delivered!
I pray for those that hush the truth and rely on there own understanding,
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
9 Years Ago
Thank you very much, Jamestown! People tend to get stuck in their self-righteousness, and their ina.. read moreThank you very much, Jamestown! People tend to get stuck in their self-righteousness, and their inability to wake up is truly horrifying.