Sálvame

Have we forgotten?

The incinerating desire for

pleasure and corruption,

where the once holy

act has become defiled.

Wines and meats dominated

the sense of the pleasant,

without thinking about

terminating their drools.

Gold and silver had devoured

their minds and conscience,

good or bad or holy or evil

regardless, only the figure matters.

Buried in nonsense of

this ordinary world of void,

failing their gifts and

talents they could dazzle with.

They spawned fire and

bruises and marks of rage,

no mercy, no restraint, no

anything as it blinds and incinerates.

Pernicious eyes fixed with

the last commandment ignored,

gleaming at the thought of

getting those in others' hand.

Lowly yet thinks that

he stands on the summit,

without knowing greater wisdom stands

beyond his field of view.

Wasted holy wine on the crucifix

which was meant to save mankind from

their eventual doom.

His present and mercy consumed

yet nothing good after cleansing

in return.

Corrupted fools.

Author's Note

Trying out a style different from my past writings. Not really grabbing hold of its representation :( Feel free to give me comments and suggestions! :D

Reviews

[Confuser]

It's beautiful: Has a Shakeperian Flare: The tone of anger and distane expressed like flying bullets in every syllable - pointed at all those that look away from their sinful ways: The greedy uncaring people of the world that have stomped on all the gifts God gave us taken for granted. You are a brilliant writer. I am not qualified to give you suggestions: I'm a 1 your talent is infinite....The title is represented very well. I love it.....Thank you again. Dale

[Kami Grace]

No way, Dale. You have no idea how significant you are in my life of being a writer. I am always eager for your comments as well as your poems. I am still a child with immature thoughts, yet from your poetry, I saw peaceful scenes and beauty of nature right in front of me. I am always stunned by your lines and the inspirations that come so smoothly. You are my teacher, Dale. I need your suggestions to carry on and improve myself. Thank you very much for reading :)

Kami

[Confuser]

OMG, I say aloud!!! I never wrote a poem until I came here; I learned for you guys....People probably think I'm odd/eccentric, but so what, I get so, so excited with the poetry I read!! I don't even remember the few poems we read in college....this is all new to me....but I have improved thanks to you & others. I'm sort of hit & miss: You are let's see...Love Music...and someone that grew up down the road: Rob Thomas: You are so Smooth!!!

[Emily]

'good or bad or holy or evil'
I love this line!
Well done!

[Kami Grace]

I'm glad you like it :D
Thank you for reading, Emily! :)

[Sami Khalil]

"Buried in nonsense of
this ordinary world of void,
failing their gifts and
talents they could dazzle with."

A very unique poem and concept...Bravo Kami..............

[Kami Grace]

Thank you for your lovely comment, Sami :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)....................

[Satan]

Am I seeing a fire spawning in front of my eyes? ;)

[Kami Grace]

Hahaha, thanks for reading and leaving a comment, Satan! :D

[Jamestown]

This is awesome! This new style you speak of is terrific, you made new
look easy, keep up the good work! Fools, I love the last stanza!!!
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed. Check out gravity if
you have a chance, thanks again!

[Kami Grace]

Thank you very much for your kind review! I will surely check out the piece! :D