Desperately Wanting

Inspired by Better than Ezra's song of the same title

Like a young girl

dancing under a golden waterfall

falling into a daydream sky

Spreading her feathered

wings so she could fly.

 

Pass the moon and the stars

 to the heavens and even further above.

Surfing the the cool spring winds 

 to find my place

in your arms

 

Both of us desperately wanting

an unspoken passion

that our eyes would scream.

Wanting to be pulled so close,

and kissed...Softly.

 

Like a young girl

dancing under a golden waterfall

falling into a daydream sky

Spreading her feathered

wings so she could fly!

 

Pass Venus and Mars

   to the heavens and even further above.

floating the gentle spring wind

 to find my place

next to you.

 

Both of us desperately wanting

an unspoken Lust

that our hearts would tease.

wanting to be pulled so close,

and kissed...please.

 

  

Author's Note

With Love,

Jayden DeVoir

Reviews

[zeronineight]

The tension feels so young, for the lack of a better word. Not juvenile, but more like a first. First partner? First romantic/sexual experience? It's unsure.

This reminds me of the loves I've had when I was younger, when I was more bound by the rules of my parents or society, yet the love, the Need that I had felt was so strong, so desperate. But still so light, so freeing. It's a complicated feeling that only makes sense in the vast expanse of our youths and it's so nice to see it reflected in your work.

Thank you for sharing!

[Matthew Kult]

Much appreciated. Thank you for stopping in.

Matthew

[ROSALIND]

Awe you write beautifully words great imagination creative sentiments love it ..
Appreciated Rosalind x

[Matthew Kult]

Thank you for taking the time.

Matthew

[lightsong]

Some really wonderful images, they served Your title prefectly to add more magical strength, I felt it dreamy with golden beams, and I'm pretty sure it would be an energetic love song, as it should be, since it's flowing with yearning passions.

[Matthew Kult]

Thank you for the wonderful review

Matthew

[RachelReaper]

The second stanza is my favorite one, great, great write here. The rhymes flowed, they were vivid and sweet.

[Sami Khalil]

"Pass the moon and the stars
to the heavens and even further above.
Surfing the the cool spring winds
to find my place
in your arms"
A very nice and sweet write. I did not know you are a hopeless romantic too dear poet...:)

[Steven]

So good. Well wrought. Just one thing--golden waterfall... My brain cannot escape sexual golden shower references, lol.

[icelandicblue]

I was really drawn to contrasting spiritual and physical imagery. There is a gentle beauty in the poem, especially the images that followed the line like a young girl. The poem is beautifully romantic.

[Winslow Des Totes]

This is very sweet, like a lullaby to a lover. "Pass Venus and Mars
to the heavens and even further above.
floating the gentle spring wind
to find my place
next to you." Is my favorite part and makes me smile like a silly kid. I especially liked the ending! Great write!

[Liza]

desperately wanting ~ this certainly rings my destructive bells ~ reaching for an illusion and being caught in a net of despair - i enjoyed reading your creation - the character is a whirlwind