I am a cloud

Your whispers warm me so....

I feel you
Lying next to me
Singing sweet whispers

Waking me from this deep

slumber, and charging

my heart and soul

Your sweet kiss
nourishing the very
core of my existence.
Feeding the burning

desires fulfillment.

I was a boy floating
in an eternal
sea drifting endlessly
lost without you.

Dreaming of you

dancing in a crystal

clear blue sky

while riding the waves

of self loathing.

Gaining insight into

life and love

changing into a man

with your gentle touch

feeling
the pureness that
you offer.

I am a cloud
  in your sky, drifting

across the soft touch

of your lips and gentle

carasses across my skin.

Floating in your

crystal clear adoration. 

Raining devoution into

your life and offering

everything that I have

to be yours.

 

Author's Note

inspired by Lily Mae's "softly in the night"

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Lily-Mae/725963/

Reviews

[icelandicblue]

I enjoyed reading the gentle cadence of this poem. However, the most striking stanzas were the ones in which you speak of transformation:

I was a boy floating
in an eternal
sea drifting endlessly
lost without you.

Dreaming of you
dancing in a crystal
clear blue sky
while riding the waves
of self loathing.

Gaining insight into
life and love
changing into a man
with your gentle touch
feeling
the pureness that
you offer.

The juxtaposition of images is really effective and they cement the reader's attention. It's highly emotive and has all the trappings of a romantic poem.

[Starbaby]

The love and care of a partner can certainly help us anchor, mature, and change for the better. Love should inspire us to be better people, to be more deserving of the adoration of the one we cherish.

[Matthew Kult]

Thank you for the review. Much appreciated

Matthew

[John the Baptist]

Any woman who can rescue you from "the waves of self loathing" is one you don't want to lose.

[Matthew Kult]

Thank you for stopping in. Much appreciated.

Matthew

[Lisasview]

Lovely,,

Have you ever thought of putting your words into a poetic form?
Lisa

[Matthew Kult]

Thanks for stopping in. Much appreciated.
I just write what I do. Forms are too complicated. Everything I write is just mine. Some like it, most hate it. But it's my style.

Matthew

[Lisasview]

I only said what I said because I felt it could easily be put into a structured poem... maybe structured is to strong a word... Bya Free Verse poem would be easy...
Just food for thought,
Lisa, now in Spain

[Kim S.]

this is a wonderful and very beautiful write.

[Matthew Kult]

Thank you for the time.

Matthew

[Alisa Js]

Aloha Matthew,

This one is written with such a pure romantic soul. Beautifully stated.

Mahalo,

Alisa

[Matthew Kult]

It's appreciated.

Matthew

[Chris Shaw]

A beautiful piece of writing. A love poem. From boy to man. Touches the senses with its finely penned stanzas. A delight to read Matthew. How confidence grows with love.

Chris

[Matthew Kult]

Thanks for stopping in

Matthew

[Obsidian]

Oh wow the romance floweth over in flourishing beautiful lines. One floats along with you, on the dreamy clouds of your words. A loving salvation from the 'self loathing'. I see you do both dark and light quite well. Lovely romantic writing.

[Matthew Kult]

Oh I do dark mostly. Every once in awhile I do light stuff. Light is what people enjoy at least they use to here.

Matthew

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Fave verse here

I was a boy floating
in an eternal
sea drifting endlessly
lost without you.
Dreaming of you
dancing in a crystal
clear blue sky
while riding the waves
of self loathing.

A beautiful poem well done 👍

[Matthew Kult]

Thank you for the time. Much appreciated.

Matthew

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

You are most welcome 🙏

[Silmara McGarry]

Absolutely outstanding write! I truly loved this poem so much!
You are an impressive writer and I am glad you have reviewed my work so I could return the kindness and be wonderfully suprised by your excellent writing skills.
Wooow!!!
All best
:-)))

[Matthew Kult]

Thanks for stopping in. Much appreciated.

Matthew

[AYVID N]

I love the softly caressing words in this poem. Appreciated so much.

[Matthew Kult]

Thank you again.

Matthew

[AYVID N]

You are most welcome...