Fade

There's a hole inside of my heart

because I miss you.

Tearing my soul slowly apart.

You make me true.

 

You're the light within my shadows.

 my life's perfect meaning.

Young lovers dancing in rainy meadows

Laughing, playing, dreaming

 

Of those days, when we would grow old

funny how dreams fade.

Emotions became uncontrolled

and the bonds that tied decayed.

 

And soon you were gone.

and I was lost and alone

wanting the night to turn into dawn

my true love, Unknown

 

 

Author's Note

Pretty sure this sucks monkey balls, let me know.

Getting great reviews, but I am just not happy with it. Hope I don't ruin it by changing it.

Reviews

[Liza]

the intensity is felt; so is the void and desperation - you may not be happy with the piece because it is drawn from darkness and being happy with darkness may be the conflict of embracing this piece, this feeling and this void...a new definition to be born of true love, unknown.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Words that are entirely felt. You put the reader In the shoes of another. Penned well.

[Matthew Kult]

Thank you. Much appreciated.

Matthew

[Neville]

I would be very pleased with both myself and my pen if I had poemed such a little gem .. Neville

[Matthew Kult]

Thanks for stopping in.

Matthew

[1809 Black Plague Decem..]

Hellos, Matthew, this chapter is really capturing
I see you have a love, and you can't tell too much about it
how she/he feels,
I really like the part about the bond decaying, strong words, :P ---Maynard

[Matthew Kult]

Thank you for finding hidden poems. Much appreciated.

Matthew

[1809 Black Plague December]

most Welcome Dearest, :P

[Chris]

Is our thoughts ever as WE see them or are they always meant to be as others perceive them? A fair question.

I believe our words are ours UNTIL they leave the pen's nib and flow into others' consciousness, Hence your depiction of woman fair - becomes another's recognition of their own perception of love found, held ...lost, and finally - remembered.

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

I agree with you but only partly.. it does not suck it left me feeling like something was missing and I cant put my finger on it but I still liked it Ive written a few that left me feeling the same way lol

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

I agree with you but only partly.. it does not suck it left me feeling like something was missing and I cant put my finger on it but I still liked it Ive written a few that left me feeling the same way lol

[Katannaism]

This shouldn't be changed at all. Its an excellent poem! The melancholic tone of it and the dark imagery is simply wonderful! It absolutely does not suck at all! Great job! ;)

[qaralynn]

great write! it definitely doesn't suck :)