The Suicide Note

Bye Mom

I write this for you

looking out the window watching the rain

cause mom, you always knew it true

trying to forget all the pain

I can't live with it anymore

Noticing a squirrel in my tree

He treats me like a dirty w***e.

wishing to be that free.

I just want you to know

waiting too long for it to never end

that you will have to let go

hoping my soul will mend

I will never be free.....

Praying for anyone to rescue me

He promised to always find me.

knowing my end begins with this tree.

I figured out How.

Accepting my fate....

Mom, it has to be now.

Refusing to live with his hate.

 

I love you, mom.  Please forgive me.

 

Love Always,

 

Samantha

Author's Note

Dancing at the end of a short rope next to a tall tree........

Reviews

[Rosalind Gale]

As it happens, I was coming over to read you. I am enamored of this poem - though for reasons I need not go into. Sad, yes of course, and yet to me, just blank, heartless, full of heart - all those clashing moods, so hard to define -
Thank you Matthew.
-x-

[Matthew Kult]

Thank you for taking the time

Matthew

[Rosalind Gale]

You are so welcome -
-x-

[MMSzesny]

Very dark.
Good emotion. I like emotion in writing. I like that it varied between italic and script. Sort of like a Hebertian inner monologue in side a story.
Interesting.
Thanks for sharing.

[The Bleeding Quill]

Very sad, but at the same time capturing the emotion to help others feel who just wouldn't understand. The image you paint it very captivating as well.

[Vicky Zhuang Yi-Yin]

this was sad, and really painful. But then again, when one has to go, one has to go. I liked the imagery here, and I liked that this poem incorporated the feel of a suicide note. Great job!
-Yin

[Erin]

"Praying for anyone to recue me" Shouldn't it be rescue? Just a thought on grammar...
Poetic, deep, filled with guilt and sorrow. You rhyme words really well -- it helped with the melancholy tone a lot. Good good...I applaud.
PBP

[LenLenxRawr]

this is so sad ;(
but i love it , and i love the idea of the two poems together
they are so different yet they have the same meaning

i can't wait to write more of your wonderful writing (;

Suicide, it must be!" That was my very last thought even before i read your note. And your brilliant idea of combining two seperate poems! The topic is soo saad. But a really great write!

[Blossom]

this is so sad!!! I love the idea of the two poems together they are so different yet have the same meaning. I love the flow and the sadness of both. they are so good. Can't wait to read more of your work.

[Miss Coral]

This was excellent.. the intertwining of two poems can be ridiculously difficult, but you pulled it off with flying colors (an analogy I've never understood). Wonderfully done.


-Coral-