Among The Cosmos

Our Starry nights are the internal war of lingering dreams waiting to fly and shine in your sky.

Thirty seconds to Venus

Thirty seconds to Mars

Among the Cosmos of our Dreams

We wake through the subconscious

I do not know how fair, how far

To display the relic we are.

I wade through the space

The black oblivion of fate

to escape 

It was not an act of blunt force

but merely a star 

Its banter is a song

the indescribable feeling

of our place among the cosmos

we fly, we soar, we shine

Among the Cosmos

We die, We cry, We rise

This mother-like galaxy

Among the meadows

Splendidly singing my song of spirit

this night sky

My warm delight

Among the stars

The one in the sky

That one is me

My source of glee

That one is me

Among the Cosmos. 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Thank you.

Reviews

[Astrid]

Lovely, beautiful, and takes the reader on a journey :)
You just wanted to put "Thirty seconds to Mars" for s***s and giggles, am I right? :P

3rd stanza: "Its banter a song" I think it's missing a word...or something? "Its bantering song" or maybe "Bantering a song"
3rd stanza: "of our feeling Among the cosmos" methinks you meant to split at lines at "Among"
Last stanza: did you mean to capitalize "Glee"?

[Matthew James Ginn]

thanks! i did not see that

[Astrid]

No problem

[Thatonegirl97]

Amazing job! I love how you made me feel like I was actually there in space. It let my mind fall free. I give you two thumbs up

[SheDragon16]

I really like this one. I almost feel like I'm there flying among the star's. It my seem weird but it makes me feel warm like a little kid again. Great job.

[Matthew James Ginn]

Glad It personally impacted you :)

[Lizardo]

I love everything about astronomy and you sir have created a great piece about the cosmos here :)
The line: "thirty seconds to mars" Reminded me of the band(which is really good xD)
Great poem! you did an awesome job writing this one :)

[Matthew James Ginn]

I know the band too cx and thank you!! I love astronomy also. Just let my dreams soar.

[Lizardo]

Exactly, just let your dreams soar. The world is a tiny place isn't it? :)