Haiku #21

Senryu

through my dying eyes

I watch the angels come down

wait... those are vultures

Author's Note

Please let me know what you think.

Reviews

[Kathy Mc Cathy]

Haikus are so meaningful when written right , you have written so beautifully bout how we are so drunk in faith that we believe every bird is an angel , truth is angels are there for people having faiths not drunkards. It d be funny to see the reactions of the people realizing those are nasty vultures 😂

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Kathy! :)

[Seth Cason]

OMG Dude!! Ha Ha Ha--- that is sick and beautiful!!! Just now, while visiting relatives are stuffing their face-holes with dismembered, indiscriminate grilled slabs of animal, I sneaked (snuck?) away and I'm glad this is the first and, for a little while, the last poem I want to review because I don't want to risk deactivating my suddenly better mood. Well, Matt, have a vulture-free holiday. I'm heading back into the family moshpit.

Seth

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Seth! :)
Have fun with your family.

[jasper]

Love it!
The contrast for the angels and vultures

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, jasper! :)

[Relic]

Yikes! This is straight out of Alred Hitchcock. A scary thought, for sure.

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Relic! :)

[Zaliodir]

Quite the comment on modern society. Maybe in the distant past some of us were angels, now we are all vultures. Thoroughly enjoyed this.

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Zaliodir! :)

[Poetic Beauty]

Waiting for angels only to be received by vultures is a disappointing thought and image

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Poet! :)

[Chris Shaw]

This to me is dark humour. I laughed. Vultures do have wings don't they? I guess that's where the similarity ends.

Chris

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Christine! :)
I suppose if the sun is in the right spot, it could look like a halo, or the shining armor of a Valkyrie. Haha

[Chris Shaw]

Yes, concentrate on the halo rather than the thought of those vultures picking your bones clean. What a thought!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I guess the vultures could definitely be fallen angels....Lucifer is the big one in the front of the pack.
j.

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Jacob! :)

[John the Baptist]

Look at it this way: They could have been drones.

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading! :)

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

Forever the pessimist I expect no less hahaha. Bravo my friend I enjoyed and laughed at this senryu. Excellent submission.

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Carlos! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Angels and Devils. Hard to tell the different sometimes my friend. Very nice use of words. Damn vultures are scary. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Coyote! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.