Haiku #21

Senryu

through my dying eyes

I watch the angels come down

wait... those are vultures

Author's Note

Please let me know what you think.

Reviews

[Kathy Mc Cathy]

Haikus are so meaningful when written right , you have written so beautifully bout how we are so drunk in faith that we believe every bird is an angel , truth is angels are there for people having faiths not drunkards. It d be funny to see the reactions of the people realizing those are nasty vultures 😂

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Kathy! :)

[Zoe Richardson]

Snort! This is priceless. And who said angels are always beautiful? Also, if you lay out in the sun long enough, the buzzards will start circling. Or so a friend told me...

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Zoe! :)

[Janed]

Haha, I love this humor. Poor vulture, he thought he was an angel too.

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Janed! :)
I think he's angelic inspiration.

[Janed]

I love Haiku, will post some later. Thanks :)

[Laz K.]

Emily Dickinson loved this theme. It's a terrible prospect when one really thinks about it.

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Laz! :)

[Robert Trakofler]

LOL maybe the vultures are just stand-ins for the angels while they have their afternoon tea

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Bunny! :)

[Betty Hermelee]

Love this Haiku poem, you certainly have a surprise ending...very clever Mat
Best, B

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Betty! :)

[Betty Hermelee]

Of course!

[Paul Bell]

Imagine that calm serenity as the Angels come down to pick you up, then totally realising they ain't no Angels.

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Paul! :)

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Paul! :)

[Neville]

what an exceptional 5 7 5 you have penned my friend .. write on :)

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading! :)

[Neville]

an absolute pleasure Matt & all mine my friend :)

[PlayWrite]

the dark humor here is great

really good write

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading! :)

[PlayWrite]

youre welcome

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

So much in few words and great humor to boot. When it's right, it's right. You just know what you need to write and what you don't. I love it when it's like that. Wonderfully explained and expressed. tyfs

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Cyprian! :)

[lightsong]

OH MY hhhhaaa! SO funny but surely scary!! this is so much like your style Matt, hahahaah really thank You for the big laugh this morning,

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Lightsong! :)