Haiku #21

Senryu

through my dying eyes

I watch the angels come down

wait... those are vultures

Author's Note

Please let me know what you think.

Reviews

[Kathy Mc Cathy]

Haikus are so meaningful when written right , you have written so beautifully bout how we are so drunk in faith that we believe every bird is an angel , truth is angels are there for people having faiths not drunkards. It d be funny to see the reactions of the people realizing those are nasty vultures 😂

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Kathy! :)

[Patricia Wedel]

Right now it seems like Vultures are overtaking our World; however there are Hosts of Angels that are under the Great Spirit whom is Omnipresent. softly, Pat

[Cherrie]

Very funny. I was prepared for the wisdom of Heaven to unfold and got Rodney Dangerfield.
Truly fun and entertaining

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Cherry! :)

[KAREN]

Wow! You have written a powerful Haiku. It's start peaceful, but that ending is dark. Nicely done!

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Karen! :)

[KAREN]

You're welcome!

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

This little write was done with a poetic pen! Loved it!

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Kathy! :)

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

My pleasure!

[Kesch (Finding Julia)]

This is really cute, I enjoyed this Haiku, it is clever

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Your senryu takes organ donation to a whole new level, Mattavelli! Angels or devils or indeed vultures....who can say? A clever piece of writing. ⚘

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Jamila! :)

[Corset]

lol, that would be my luck for sure. loved it, too funny. with a twist of morbid fate

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Corset! :)

[Writergurl]

Finally someone who knows how to write a form write...
this is really good and cute.
Awesome write

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading! :)

[light and ashes]

WOW. This is great. I am speechless.

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading! :)

[light and ashes]

You are so VERY welcome! You did such a fantastic job! :)

[JE Falcon]

LOL, you caught me by surprise. :)

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, JE! :)