Darkness

A short rhyming bedtime story, written easy to read, for children.

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Once, there was a happy girl,

Who’d dream and dance all day.

She loved to chat with all her friends,

and all the games they’d play.

 

But most of all, she loved to draw

and share her art, not shy.

And she was drawing when she saw

The black dot in the sky.

 

At first, it seemed a tiny thing,

soon hidden by a cloud.

But when she looked a second time,

she shouted, “Hey!”, out loud.

 

The dot had grown by quite a bit,

and kept on as she stared.

It grew so fast, she couldn’t sit.

She ran inside, so scared.

 

She shouted, “Daddy, where are you?”,

and found him in his room.

She dragged him to the window,

where they shared the view of doom.

 

The world outside was wiped away,

all disappeared and gone.

The blackness that consumed the day

was creeping up the lawn.

 

So, Daddy shut the curtains,

and he turned on every light,

but soon that darkness was inside

to take away their sight,

 

and cover every sound,

so all the world made not a peep.

And, soon that happy girl had found

that it was time to sleep.

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End

 

 

Author's Note

Please let me know what you think.

Reviews

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

So very dark and I enjoyed it. You have such a complex mind my friend that I have no doubt it is constantly filled with many thoughts of art yet to be written. As good a poet as you are you shouldn't go too long without writing at least something each day or so. I just know there is a huge treasure chest of unwritten poetry in that mind of yours. You should be writing more because just like this poem and your other works it's proof your a writer. As an eternal optimist I hope a flood of ideas rains down on you so we can get more new art out of you.

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading and the encouragement, Carlos! :)
I post poems when I feel like it; which isn't that often, but I dont feel a rush to do it. The pleasure that I get out of writing a poem, comes from sculpting thoughts into patterns. I enjoy the puzzle of it. But, its not a thing I feel like doing every day. Or, maybe the time between my postings is simple a drawn out pause for dramatic effect. Haha

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

I get it my friend and respect your answer. As a fan of your work I simply wish to see more current art of yours. But that is just a bit of selfishness on my part. Art shouldn't be forced or rushed. Thank you again Matt.

[Aura]

Bravo!! I loved this, what a sweet story/poem. It tells the story a little girl drawing, and seeing a big dark dot in the sky. This will definitely appeal to little kids for a bedtime story because a) The girl in the story is little and loves to draw, b) you use child language such as black dot in the sky to describe evening or night, when it's time to sleep. It was a short and nice way of saying that when it gets dark, it is time to sleep. A nice message. Excellent job!

[Cherrie]

The emptiness at the stories end is fortified by the the fact that they have each other.

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading! :)

[Kesch (Finding Julia)]

Goodness, this has power and it is kind of dark, I did enjoy it
i love your rhyme ability, amazing write

[Writergurl]

So very emotional, i enjoyed this, this write kind of touched me as well.
You are very poetic and talented, hope you keep on writing.

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading! :)

[William Michael Reeves]

I'm trying so hard to know what the dark dooming point is. The easy one is an eclipse. But somehow I think you had something darker on your mind?

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, William! :)
I wrote this with illustrations in mind. Its a mysterious expanding darkness that consumes the girl's world.

[William Michael Reeves]

I'm intrigued! Do you write of this mysterious expanding darkness in other poems? Are you an artist, illustrator, graphic novel stuff?

[mattavelli]

I had a plan to write a collection of dreadful bedtime stories. I imagined the stories with illustrations, but I am not an illustrator. I used to enjoy sketching, but I was never any good with texture.

[lightsong]

I couldn't help but laughing at the end, some children You need to scare them if You want them to SLEEP, not the great method but sometimes we have no choice. aside of that, this is so wonderful and talented, even as an adult I enjoyed it ;>.

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Light! :)

[Dylan Macadham]

A well crafted offering in the tradition of a frighten-the-child fairy tale :)
~Dylan

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Dylan! :)

[Chris Shaw]

Delightfully narrated, such wonderful rhythm and rhyme here mattavelli. Great imagery too. A child with a wild imagination. I was that child once and my Dad would often have to come in and switch the light on to calm me down. Once I saw the cartwheels in a painting on the wall start rolling out of the picture frame. I thought I was about to be crushed. Thank you for evoking memories of my dear Dad with little me. Thank you.

Chris

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Christine! :)
And, thanks for sharing your vivid imagination with us through your writing.

[Chris Shaw]

And, thank you too and have a lovely weekend :)

[Poetic Beauty]

This could be an episode of the Twilight Zone where all creep unexplainable things happen. Creative and well written telling a tale of a black hole taking over wiping out everything

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Poet! :)