My Caramel Sundae

I wrote this for the hottest chick of all time, hoping to get lucky.

 

In the land of hot chicks, there is a queen.

 

She’s the hottest chick I’ve ever seen.

I’ve seen a lot and I was amazed,

When that chick’s looks left me so dazed.

She nearly knocked me out, smiling in her way,

I’d like to see the rest someday.

 

She’s my Caramel Sundae

 

She’s a storm of sexy, tearing up the Earth

And she knows just what she’s worth.

With her innocent eyes and crafty wits

Man I’d like to grab her….

 

Sweet Caramel Sundae

 

You know I’d like to eat her cherry

But she makes me feel like Tom chasing Jerry.

I’ll chase her my whole life, because I just can’t let her pass.

I’ve got to grab a hold of her magnificent….

 

Oh, sweet angels of mercy don’t make me wait.

I want her on my dessert plate.

I need her now and this may sound corny,

But that chick just plain makes me horny.

 

Oh apex of women, I know you can hear me.

Now you know that I need you near me.

You stole my mind and my heart went following.

If you leave me now, you’ll leave me wallowing

In a broken life, with no hope for joy,

Why not just make me your lover boy?

Reviews

[FLCJournPress]

Thank you for entering the contest. The poem is very nice and the meaning is direct which makes it quite easy to read. Its also funny yet quite thought provoking. By the way, this is PG13 XD

[AG]

wildly contemporary yet artful.

a 40s poetic pin-up that oozes with sentiment and sexiness.

kudos!

[Fabian G. Franklin]

This was hilarious! I don't know that subtlety is your strong point...but hey, you get the message across! lol

If the hot doesn't like this you'll know it's because
She just wants to kiss but you've got some big....kahunas. lol

[Onyx Sky]

This really makes me laugh:)
Great job! And thanks for submission

[Dianna Reneé]

Whoa... It flows really well and is more like a song. I really like it though.

[Cassandra]

Very flowy and cute... i like the intentional words left out. Made me giggle. I thought the last 3 stanzas were quite clever.

[Marie]

That's very nice. Who was it written for? If I may ask. Sorry, I'm incurably nosy.

[Cynthia Yildirim]

Nice it's more like a song to me. :)

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

lol great piece. Thanks for sharing this with me.

[Yemaya Theresa]

I Love it very cool.