Come on, my friend, embrace life's pain, the heartbreaks, and your death to come. Don't drench yourself in worry's rain and drag through soggy days, so glum. Go slam your dreams upon that drum that rages in your chest so sure as breaths you seize approach their sum and fearless thoughts are all that's pure.
There's comfort in the wallowing and moaning when life's oh so tough, but poison's all you're swallowing and tainted confidences bluff. Don't fantasize that hope's enough. Break free. The action is the cure. Be willful and grind smooth those rough and fearful thoughts. And, bleed them pure.
The world's a blaze and you a spark, a flame, soon smoke and blown out ash; so burn on 'til your skies are dark and strangle time 'til moments flash. And, on that final breeze, you thrash, through whipping winds you won't endure, let all the gods proclaim you brash and fearless and a life so pure.
This is a wonderfully powerful read, and again, it seems that "you saved the best for last". --- "And, on that final breeze, you thrash,
through whipping winds you won't endure,
let all the gods proclaim you brash
and fearless and a life so pure." --- Well done.
I liked it. :) I think this is a very important message for us all to keep in mind. Especially this part:
"There's comfort in the wallowing
and moaning when life's oh so tough,
but poison's all you're swallowing "
Great rhyming too. :)
Your wording and phrasing here is so incredibly unique, moving and completely stunning. I was trying to pick out the phrases that appealed specifically, but there are two many, I would be quoting half your words back at you.
I imagine this one holds broad appeal, as the message is a popular one, but the rendering here is special.
This is one of the most beautifully-written & dead-on true statements that I've ever read. It brought tears to my eyes thru-out. I'm crying even tho I just took a few puffs which would usually make me feel like laughing. You have described exactly what it took for me to walk again after not being able to for 5 years & when people thought I was crazy to keep trying (it took 2 years, all told). Also, my mind was so dull & forgetful from the neck injury, I couldn't form a sentence without forgetting once or twice what I was saying, in the middle of every sentence. I never dreamed I'd be able to write like I do now. But when I was most broken, I had nothing else to do but try or die in spirit. Your poem is the perfect balance between reaching out in gentle understanding & yet also kicking the person in the butt a little bit if they've stopped trying. There are millions of broken people out there who need to read this amazing poem . . . it can put the breeze under one's wings (((HUGS)))
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Thank you, Barleygirl! :)
Im impressed, two years of effort! Have you written about it?
8 Years Ago
I've written a longer version & a byte-size version . . . but I'm not satisfied with either. The mor.. read moreI've written a longer version & a byte-size version . . . but I'm not satisfied with either. The more I recover, the more I understand about the journey. It took me a full year to just take a few faltering steps without cane or crutches . . . the next year I developed the ability to do stuff like chores & carrying stuff, etc.
I'd like to read the story. Where you in an accident?
8 Years Ago
This is the short version:
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/barleygirl/1762759/
read moreThis is the short version:
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/barleygirl/1762759/
Longer version for sale ($10) on amazon kindle store (if you're interested, I can give you link).
My neck injury was a slow degradation of neck vertebrae over years & then one day it just slipped into an offset position where my spinal cord was crushed to half the size. Main paralysis was in my legs. I've been very blessed to have good upper body functioning most of the time. Thanks for caring & sharing (((HUGS)))
8 Years Ago
Oh damn! I see this message got truncated! I was just saying the longer version is for sale ($10) on.. read moreOh damn! I see this message got truncated! I was just saying the longer version is for sale ($10) on Amazon Kindle. My neck injury was a slow degradation over years & then one day it popped into an offset position where my spinal cord was crushed to half the size. Most paralysis was in my legs & I was blessed to be functional in my upper body. Thanks for caring & sharing (((HUGS)))
I love love love this piece. It truly speaks to me...on so many levels. My favorite lines are: Be willful and grind smooth those rough...and fearful thoughts. And, bleed them pure. Sometimes we have to take the bull by the horns and brave the process...fight through the fear of what might happen. Nothing worth having comes without a price...without pain...even if that's only self-discovery. It's a beautiful poem. Thank you so much for posting this.
So happy I stopped to click on this one. An inspiring poem, such a great message.
Good to hear these words in time when we start feeling the weight of life.
Nice job buddy.
LIFE IS A PARTY. DON'T BE A PINATA.
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