Ballade for Denial

Ballade

Should you attempt to ease my pain,
take warning, mine's a toxic brew,
with any spillage sure to stain
and burn its noxious way down through
those armored plates protecting you,
concealing that soft heart beneath,
a treat this beast will slowly chew...
the hopes left stuck between sharp teeth.

My dark mind's torn and hardly sane,
left barren since her love withdrew,
and charities would but profane
those memories I hold askew,
those cloudy thoughts of love so true,
those daggers hid in yearning's sheath
that slice when others misconstrue...
the hopes left stuck between sharp teeth.

Go hang from your damned sugarchain
of coaxes meant to help renew.
There are no passions to regain.
There's nothing left here to imbue.
My shattered rose rejects your glue.
It's not a blossom for your wreath.
So, toss your thoughts of breaking through...
the hope's left stuck between sharp teeth.

And, if a doubt remains as to
the character that's underneath,
then tease my shell and watch me spew
the hopes left stuck between sharp teeth.

Author's Note

I let the idea of writing a ballade tumble around in my head for about a week, then wrote it all in one late night go. Why did a monster pop out?
Please let me know what you think.

Check out this link for an explanation of the ballade form and a lovely poem.
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/RichardJ/1619403/

Reviews

[Bhuyanshi Talukdar]

Your poem is raw and emotional. The imagery and language used to describe your pain and the toxicity of your emotions are powerful. Your use of repetition in the poem emphasizes the idea that the hope you have left is fragile and easily shattered. The message of the poem is clear: you are in pain and you do not want anyone to try to ease it. The last stanza is particularly striking, as it suggests that others should be cautious in approaching you because of the intensity of your emotions. Overall, the poem is well-written and conveys a strong message about the complexities of pain and the difficulty of healing.

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, and the feedback! :)

[Kaylee April]

The rhyming in this is amazing. You truly caught my ear and gave a melody to this poem. It has lovely sparks of madness.

[mattavelli]

Thank you, Kaylee. :)

[andrew mitchell]

A tremendous job here so well produced. One of your finest Matt

[mattavelli]

Thanks, Andrew.

[E G TEN]

Awesome Ballade Matt,
Well structured and formatted
To a distinctive words, that only you could have
Versed it. Thanks for Sharing!

[mattavelli]

Thanks, EG. :)

[Francis Orion]

Excellent poem, great rhyme scheme, very well written. Great job!

[mattavelli]

Thank you, Francis.

[Ruth]

Powerful flow of emotions, a woven reflection, sometimes we feel the pain is so deep that healing is beyond reach, even if hands reach out to attempt to bring the light and understand us...insightful piece and poignant...

[mattavelli]

Thank you, Poppy.

[Emily]

Very nice poem!
Well done!!

[mattavelli]

Thanks, Emily.

[Arezzo]

Well, this is quite something.

You have handled a difficult rhyme scheme (and difficult rhymes!) with aplomb. The meaning is sustained evenly throughout -- you don't fall into the trap of a strong stanza followed by a couple of weak ones.

Splendid effort.

[mattavelli]

Thank you, Arezzo. I tried to get all I could out of each syllable.

[Arezzo]

And that's what a good poet should do!

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Very good, Matt. I like the form and it reads fluently. About the subject, it's indeed tinted black, but I find it a real succes. Well done. :) Rudi

[mattavelli]

Thank you, Rudi. :)

[Gee]

I really have no idea what a Ballade is,or should be Matt,but enjoyed greatly the undoubted skill and ability you have shown in posting this.You're up there with the best on this site,seemingly being able to turn your hand to all styles.Great work

[mattavelli]

Thanks, Gee. I enjoy trying the different forms. :)

[Tomás Ó C..]

The form of the poem is cool... but its the poem and the mood of it that makes it memorable... love thje lines "My shattered rose rejects your glue.
It's not a blossom for your wreath. "

[mattavelli]

Thank you, Thomas. :)