Pantoum

Wow, this is a tricky form...

The pantoum is the poet's task.
It twists the mind, that rhyming test.
I'm left with a strong need to ask,
is there a method you'd suggest?

It twists the mind, that rhyming test.
Rewrites add wrinkles to my brain.
Is there a method you'd suggest
to keep me from going insane?

Rewrites add wrinkles to my brain
as I struggle to end my phrase.
to keep me from going insane,
could you offer a little praise?

As I struggle to end my phrase,
I'm left with a strong need to ask,
could you offer a little praise?
The pantoum is the poet's task!

Author's Note

Thank you Richard, for introducing me to the Pantoum form.
Here is a link to Richard's page. He explains this the poetic form in his author's note.
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/RichardJ/1612644/

Before you check that out, please let me know what you think.

Reviews

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Well-done, Matt, on this pantoum...it's a great exercise for the brain and entertaining for the reader...love the idea of writing a pantoum about writing a pantoum...

[mattavelli]

Thanks, Ft. It's a challenging form.

[Roland Petrov]

Well done! I'm trying it myself, but I fear this form will get the better of me. Your take reflects what I did with the Villanelle, writing about writing the poem. You pulled it off!

[mattavelli]

Thanks, Roland. Ya, it's a tricky one, but you can do it. I'd been writing one about my family, emotions, and the weather in south Florida, but couldn't wrap up the end, so I switched topics and vented. Haha

[Roland Petrov]

My attempt is posted; can hardly believe that I actually wrote one!

[Roland Petrov]

Ah, here we are. I remember this one. I wrote mine at the same time. I think Richard put us up to it.

[AaronFreitas]

Very interesting form... I enjoyed it. Definitely something different than I am used to seeing but still awesome :)

[mattavelli]

Thanks, Aaron. :)

[andrew mitchell]

lol I liked this different approach, you did well and entertained I was!

[mattavelli]

Thanks, Andrew. :)

[Joshua Carl Cruz]

i like it. anything undertaken with the objective of adhering to its form is an endevour worthy of praise. since im not familiar with this one i will book over to thatguys page for a bit of education. thanks matt

[mattavelli]

Thanks, Josh. Ya, this form was a puzzle for me. Id spent hours trying to get the phrasing of another, more complex, attempt to work out, and got a headache, so I set it aside. This one popped out in fifteen minutes.

[The Archangel Gabriel]

I want to say that your poetry seems to be improving. I can't remember exactly. I like the rhyme! I think you are polishing up your work like me. Great effort!

[mattavelli]

Thanks, Gabe. Ya, I've been putting more effort into my poems. I've been enjoying the different forms of poetry. Writing has helped me to rebuild my vocabulary.

[Fran Marie]

Some of these forms can indeed drive you insane, lol, I wrote a
Pantoum quite a few years back..tricky but found the sestina form
To be more challenging still..your poem here is very good..nice work

[mattavelli]

Thank you, Fran. I just looked up the sestina. It looks like a beast. Haha.. I had to read the instructions three times. Is yours post with your writing?

[Fran Marie]

you're welcome Matt. yes, I posted both my Pantoum and Sestina onto WC page 22 and 72 on see all my writing list..

[mattavelli]

I knew id asked you about your pantoum already. Haha
I'll give it a search.