Sonnet For Regrets

In the Italian style

The moon does seem to mirror my regret,
with light that fails to brighten skies to day,
it cannot blot those stars, so far away;
those jewels I could not reach and can't forget.

And as the weak one in heaven's duet;
that pale comparison, shining so grey,
without the strength to forge it's own display,
those beams reflect resentment for my debt.

But should we ask the sun of jealousies
or failures through the years, when one's self-tasked;
I think we'll find regrets are not so rare,

when dreams to paint your face upon black seas
or glow with lovers on the nights they basked
are shattered by your own confounding glare.

Author's Note

Please let me know what you think.

Reviews

[William Michael Reeves]

Oooh! I really like this poem! Mixing celestial laws with emotional introspection. Now that I have a full understanding of meter I can appreciate the effort and skill necessary to write a poem as illuminated as this. Crepuscular light is enough when faced with self in the mirror.

Seems you resolved the octave by asking a question in the sestet, then answer, then qualify that assertion in the last half of the sestet.

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Bill! :)
Ya, the turn comes with the sestet. Are you enjoying the form poetry?

[William Michael Reeves]

Writing sonnets hurts so good! A lot like sex. Just finished my first ballade yesterday. Almost as difficult. Richard's lessons, and his technique as a teacher, really illustrated what you had tried to help me understand way back. Meter, meter, meter! And then the punctuation! Such a satisfying pain in the brain.

You might get a kick out of the sonnet I wrote about Richard. Find 'Two Sonnets' on my second page now I think. The other one has some wordplay which might be a sonneteering no no. Advancing words. 'Once A Boulder' and 'Love Rings Fire' are recent. I have 3 cooling off in front of me now. Yes, I LOVE form poetry. Playing around with fusing different forms together too. The inspiration I found in your feedback is still in me. Thank you!

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Regrets reflected in things around us as we try to find the better parts of ourselves... enjoyed this sonnet, Mattavelli

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, FT. :)

[Kshitij Srivastava]

I liked how you kept it conventional throughout except the rhyme scheme of the tercets. Thanks for sharing. :)

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Kshitij. abba abba cde cde rhyme here.

[Kshitij Srivastava]

Ya got that :)

[~]

I think you did a wonderful job! And I am always biased whenever there is work mentioning the "weak one in heaven's duet" :D
Although it talks about regrets, it still carries a positive feeling within it. :D

[mattavelli]

Thank you, Ms. Strongskittles. Ya, I was going for the old story about greener grasses(brighter skies).

[~]

hehehehe :D love your clever brain!

[mattavelli]

Bah, I'm a little piece of broken glass reflecting your radiance.

[~]

mmmm that is worth a poem :D

[mattavelli]

Did I win this time? I can't tell. It never happens.

[~]

YES!! you did :D

[mattavelli]

Woohoo!!!! Whats my prize?

[~]

A big virtual hug and the satisfaction of kowing that you did not lose LOL

[mattavelli]

:p I won't quit my day job.......

[~]

LOL........