Sonnet For Regrets

In the Italian style

The moon does seem to mirror my regret,
with light that fails to brighten skies to day,
it cannot blot those stars, so far away;
those jewels I could not reach and can't forget.

And as the weak one in heaven's duet;
that pale comparison, shining so grey,
without the strength to forge it's own display,
those beams reflect resentment for my debt.

But should we ask the sun of jealousies
or failures through the years, when one's self-tasked;
I think we'll find regrets are not so rare,

when dreams to paint your face upon black seas
or glow with lovers on the nights they basked
are shattered by your own confounding glare.

Author's Note

Please let me know what you think.

Reviews

[William Michael Reeves]

Oooh! I really like this poem! Mixing celestial laws with emotional introspection. Now that I have a full understanding of meter I can appreciate the effort and skill necessary to write a poem as illuminated as this. Crepuscular light is enough when faced with self in the mirror.

Seems you resolved the octave by asking a question in the sestet, then answer, then qualify that assertion in the last half of the sestet.

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Bill! :)
Ya, the turn comes with the sestet. Are you enjoying the form poetry?

[William Michael Reeves]

Writing sonnets hurts so good! A lot like sex. Just finished my first ballade yesterday. Almost as difficult. Richard's lessons, and his technique as a teacher, really illustrated what you had tried to help me understand way back. Meter, meter, meter! And then the punctuation! Such a satisfying pain in the brain.

You might get a kick out of the sonnet I wrote about Richard. Find 'Two Sonnets' on my second page now I think. The other one has some wordplay which might be a sonneteering no no. Advancing words. 'Once A Boulder' and 'Love Rings Fire' are recent. I have 3 cooling off in front of me now. Yes, I LOVE form poetry. Playing around with fusing different forms together too. The inspiration I found in your feedback is still in me. Thank you!

[Fran Marie]

a beautifully penned sonnet in both form and content..
and yes, regrets are not so rare as we might think''..
I like the Italian style sonnet form , one of my favorites....

nice work..

[mattavelli]

Thank you, Fran Marie. :)

[Confuser]

mattavelli: I love sonnets and you did not disappoint. How gorgeous it is..we all have regrets. The flow is perfection, your words are decadent, superb placement and language rich as black diamonds, shiny lucid and powerful. I love it!
But should we ask the sun of jealousies
or failures through the years, when one's self-tasked;
I think we'll find regrets are not so rare,
How talented you are! I am in awe! Thank you - Dale

[mattavelli]

Thank you, Dale. Your comments always brighten my day. :)

[Confuser]

You're welcome!

[Jess Armstrong]

Super good! Love the first line!

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Jess. :)

[Anxious Pen]

This speaks to me on many levels. Thank you.

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading. :)

[Valentine]

You are really showing more of your inner self in your writes. Well done. Valentine

[mattavelli]

Thank you, Valentine.

[Mitali Shah]

when dreams to paint your face upon black seas
or glow with lovers on the nights they basked
are shattered by your own confounding glare.
Loved it Matt

[mattavelli]

Thanks, Mitali. :)

[Roland Petrov]

You're toying with me again! You make it seem to easy. This one flows nicely and it's lovely to read.

[mattavelli]

Thanks, Roland. These are difficult for me. That's why I like them. I've been getting more and more footloose with the meter. I'll end up with free verse.

[Michael Stevens]

I was drawn by the title of this, as I've got more regrets than a sale at Mervin's in the guilt isle. Regret and guilt are my two best friends--excellent poem!

[mattavelli]

Thanks, Michael. You should get the "NO REGERTS" tattoo.

[Michael Stevens]

Yeah, I think you're right!

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thanks for sharing this excellent sonnet, Matt, I love it. Strong metaphors in it...well done. :) Rudi

[mattavelli]

Thank you, Rudi. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"ask the sun of jealousies"
love that phrase...

i am not much for rhyming, form poetry...but your wording is so good in this one that it distracts me from the form...and i don't feel confined when i read it...i am free to enjoy the message and the feel of the words.

[mattavelli]

Thank you, Jacob. I didn't let the meter confine me much when I wrote it. :)