Beauty to Ash

Inspired by personal experience

What was once before
So beautiful
Silhouetted against the sky
Your beauty

Hair blows in the wind
Can this day never end
You are my precious
Rapture, bliss within

What has happened
I cannot know
You lay before me
Skin perfect-dark and lips so red...

You sleep, my child
Please, only a little while
Where do you go
Oh, return to me

Before me you turn to ash
What once was is no more
For this I never asked
And I miss you so...

Return to me, my darling

Reviews

[Sunni Davis]

Its beautiful;makes me cry a bit.

[lee von cleef]

looking at her hand so alive, warm , inviting, colors yes, but frozen the rest," What once was is no more" this poem sparks , the tumbling to hold to my losses,close to the treasure in my chest.

Such a good piece of pure Romance, you felt for the lady. I bow for you

E.L.

[Trixolomanea]

Again, I really liked it! I really like your style and your phrasing!

You've gained a(nother) fan! :)

[allie_arrowz]

so sweet.
the last line is so pretty.

[MOON]

Almost like a song , poignant love once beautiful a shadow of itself. Beautiful.

[Chip]

The imagery you put in my head was good! I can think of two ways of interpretating this: either a loved one literally did die or your love for each other has died.

Either way its very good!

[joshua deathdealer]

This is very emotional and the beauty to ash imagery was stunning. Excellent work.

[just is]

Such an emotional read, i really enjoyed this. I can feel the hurt in this.
Simply amazing write.

[An owl on the moon]

A powerful twist of phrase filled with the ache of letting go.. So much pain flows through your words.. line by line as the beauty gives way to the shadow left behind. Emotionally stunning.