Created visions

I wrote this about 5 years ago but I am not sure about it. Tell what you think?

When I woke my bed was empty
Swallowing my granola
Visions of the past fluttered in my head
A Ferris wheel image of my empty bed
Everyone always finding family
I sit a the end of my empty bed
Lies of punishment being only for the guilty
My visions moved with time
I skipped graduation
To weak to see your proud parents
When no one needs you, you need no one
Visions please just let me be
Floating from cove to cove for cover
Cover from people I never met
What a weak person to be scared of everyone
What a wasted life to run from love
These visions certain to be my final thought
There's a glimpse of chance
A chance to smile, to love, to have family
Please Please Please
Don't run don't be scared
This chance maybe the last
If only I could gamble this once
But to the middle of the ocean I ran

Reviews

[marlayesterday]

Thank you for sharing this. This goes straight to my heart. cover from people I never met. I just really get this one. Great work. :)

[Freedom's Child]

Thank you

[Talismanic]

'What a wasted life to run from love' -
That line kind of stopped every other thought in my head in its tracks.
'This chance (may be) the last' ?
Purely superb:)

[Freedom's Child]

Thank you

[MOON]

Emotional write , it's like watching others dreams materialise while yours don't come to fruitition.

[Freedom's Child]

Thank you

[The Refined Poet]

full of emotion. well written.

[Freedom's Child]

thank you

[Harley (arbiter)]

Dude! I love it! You don't know how much I can relate! Ah my golly. I'm almost crying. That was simply amazing. Thank you for writing that

[Freedom's Child]

Thank You and I'm glad you like!