My Mommy

While you were held ever so Gently in your mommy's care
I was laying at the trunk of a tree
While you were crawling towards your daddy
I was crawling in a vacant field
While you holding your mommy's hand
I was stumbling from branch to branch
While you and your daddy were playing catch
I was listening to the whispering wind atop a tree
While you were on your family vacation
I was on a deserted beach embraced by the ocean

Now you tell me that I am wrong
When I can stand between you and nature
Now you tell me I'm a threat
When I defend the only mother I had
If I treated your mother
The way you have treated my mother
Would you sit peacefully in a corner?

Reviews

[MOON]

Poignant , protected by mother earth yet we scorn the touch and break her heart. Personal too excellent write.

[Freedom's Child]

Thank you!

[Heather]

Such a great poem about Mother Earth, we should all protect her like she is our flesh and blood... she is. Great message in this poem, I enjoyed it. Thank you!

[Freedom's Child]

Thank you!

[Legolas]

This is such a deep mom. Nature deserves respect and unfortunately people don't respect nature. I try my best to. The metaphor was great. Good job.

[Freedom's Child]

Thank you!

[David the writer]

This was well written showing a well made point. I liked how you contrated them, and at the end you asked a simple question making this poem complete.

[Freedom's Child]

Thank you

[Walker Andreasen]

You did an excellent job showing the contrast and proving your point. I loved the fact you did so with such excellent flow. you also did an excellent job staying on point. Well done! I enjoyed this very much!

[Freedom's Child]

Thank You!

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APPLAUDS!!!

[Freedom's Child]

Thank you!

[Samuel Dickens]

I wish those who abuse our planet understood this cry, but apparently they don't, or just as likely, don't care. Very good writing, Pence, and a most important message.

[Freedom's Child]

Thank you! Sadly I agree it seems so many people just don't care and just see nature as a resource to make money.

[JourneyBlu]

Nice....I love the way you paint a picture and story with the poem, but leave the reader to their own conclusion. Well written and thank you for sharing!

[Freedom's Child]

Thank you!