escape

Its about a one sided lover ... a girl and her emotions..

She glanced at the night sky,
The moon, the stars and to the infinite,
She stared with a heavy heart
And thoughts preoccupied.

Like a bare yew tree
She stood with remorse,
Exemplifying eternal morbidity.
Tears rolled down her eyes
Leaving her nostalgic.

Perhaps she needed him the most
The love of her life,
When she felt alone.
She longed for his presence
To solace her soul of grim,
For she was in love with him;

But he never understood her love
so serene;
Indeed pushed her to the
spatial void,
Leaving her morose and abandoned.

And now she is a melancholic soul
Yearning to be happy,
As an escape to the dejection! !!

Author's Note

Hope u all like it..

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Strong description allowed the emotion to come alive.
"But he never understood her love
so serene;
Indeed pushed her to the
spatial void,
Leaving her morose and abandoned."
The above lines made their point. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Masoom Nasiha Hussain]

:) thanks a lotzz for such valuable words
best wishes
masoom

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

I think we all felt this way one time or another. It is a truly sad feeling to love someone so deeply, but having our love unreciprocated, unappreciated. You have a very sweet-like melancholy style of writing.

[Masoom Nasiha Hussain]

Thanx for such lovely words...
Yaeh the feelings make u a poet
Be blessed :)
Masoom

[Elisa]

Your voice when you write reminds me so much of Barbara Kingsolver, author of "The Bean Trees". Kind of a random remark, but I completely mean it as a compliment. The first two stanzas are especially wonderful in their use of imagery, and I love how the later stanzas convey emotions that connect back to the images presented in the beginning of the poem. That gives the poem continuity, something that's really hard for poets to achieve. In fact, it's the aspect of poetry that I struggle with the most. I can't wait to read more of your writing. Keep it up girl!

[Masoom Nasiha Hussain]

Thank u so much for such lovely words :)
It has proved that loving someone deeply makes us a poet ... indeed I hv bcum..
It feels really good wen sumone compliments ur writing :)
God bless u
Masoom

[DoormanDan]

Out of all of the love poems I have ever read, this one is most definitely the best. It has an awesome flow, use of imagery, atmosphere ,and you have used great vocabulary. All of those have come together to make quite a piece. Great job!

[Masoom Nasiha Hussain]

thanxx a lots for such a lovely review :)
best wishes
masoom

[EdmundLinton]

Excellent development of thought. Superb writing. It reads like a tragic tale, leading me to want to know more. Would make a great short story.

I may be a bit misled by S2 L3 - Does the Yew tree naturally shed it's leaves? I could not connect "morbidity",
unless the tree was burned or experienced an unnatural state.

In the last line, happiness seems the obvious, although not exclusive, opposite of dejection. Often broken hearts will accept a less than desired state in order to escape dejection. That's why a broken heart is so painful - happiness seems unimaginable, unattainable. What's the next worse thing to dejection?

[Masoom Nasiha Hussain]

thank u for such a lovely review :) well s2 basically describes abt yew tree which is a symbol of sadness... yew tree sheds its leaves in winter n luks lifeless depressd..similarly the girl is sad so sad dat sadnes hs bcum a part of her life it has made her suffered like as in a diseased state...dats forever morbidity.. n she is tired of dis sadness n longes to b happy again in life
so dat she cn live the rest of her life without him as a means of escape..though she vl b forever sad from widin..

[Jamestown]

This is well written, the emotions shine through very clear, I appreciate you sharing and b-blessed!

[Masoom Nasiha Hussain]

thanx a lotz n same to u
be blessed
masoom

[Masoom Nasiha Hussain]

Thank you all for such encouraging words..

[GreenEyedPoet]

This is beautifully written, good job!

[Masoom Nasiha Hussain]

thank u :)

[GreenEyedPoet]

Welcome. :)

[Lyndy]

I like this poem. :D It's very beautiful and the used of words are very good.

A poem well written! :D

[Masoom Nasiha Hussain]

atleast it caught ur atention.. i m happy :)
thank u
be blessed