BlackGreyWhite

 

I’m waiting to be discarded and

Thrown away like yesterday’s news

Fading away into BlackGreyWhite

Until I mean nothing to you, once more

 

I’m nothing special to you, you know

I’m just another domino

Standing in my line

Awaiting my turn to fall

I wouldn’t have it if I thought I meant something to you

 

There is nothing that means a thing

At the end of this light-saturated day

So throw me away like a puppet

At least you’d remember me that way

Find yourself someone else

Who actually means something to you

Something other than BlackGreyWhite

Melting away from view

Reviews

OoooLike this..!i like the extend newspaper metaphor-creates realy good images and use of colour is good too!My favourite part is:Find yourself someone else Who actually means something to you Something other than BlackGreyWhite Melting away from view very nice!Much Love...Xo

[Adam McWhorter]

Very nice. You wrote this piece very well... I love the colors (black, gray, & white) and the way you repeate them in word and in image (the newspaper, for example). I would have to say my favorite is the domino image -

"I�m nothing special to you, you know
I�m just another domino
Standing in my line
Awaiting my turn to fall"

Very cool... I would have never thought of using a domino as imagery in a poem, but it's very precise / perfect for this piece. It goes along with the color idea and shows you falling down - in one way or another at the fault of the unheard voice. Is it a lover? A father? A friend? Mother? There's no clear definition... and that's what makes it so good. Anyone can relate.

Good work!
Adam

[Hold Fast Hope]

The title got me to clicking this because it isn't an ordinary title like the rest of the poems out there. I really like this and "I�m waiting to be discarded and thrown away like yesterday�s news"
Amazing line. I really like that line because you can honestly relate it to people who just get bored of their partner and just throw them away. good job.

[Sarah]

hmmm....i agree with Ali. This just doesnt sound like you...but personally I like"I�m nothing special to you, you know
I�m just another domino
Standing in my line
Awaiting my turn to fall"

[Conversing Empty Words]

I liked it, but regardless, I miss YOUR style. This didn't feel like Ben McCabe.