Them

I have to become them

If I am to survive

because in this box

I can never thrive

Will I just die out,

become extinct

What is this about?

Why are they after me

Persuit of happiness

is a right

then shouldn't it

be worth the fight

Should i just give in

end this all here

Keep on fighting

or face my worst fear

I could just give in

Do what they all want

just become one of them

but, it's just a thought.

Reviews

[intangible_soul]

Breaking out and knowing oneself is of utmost importance. Just remember, there are lots of boxes to break out of. So I guess you have to decide which box is most oppressive. I liked this. The rhythm was a little broken, but the words hit home well.

[Dave Lounsbury]

I enjoyed your poem hippy

[Ed Rector]

screw conformity... just my opinion... anyway this piece is well writen in the since that we all must decide if we shall be the many white sheep or that black sheep... hope you find your way... and well done.

[JC Fox]

A wonderful poem filled with thought and lots of questions on whether to conform or just be yourself, the sad thing is everyone is telling us to be ourselves but conforming to the rest of society is what they really want. Great write!

[Chad Wesley Allbrett]

Good job, there is a lot of pressure toward conformity isn't there?

[facadeofshadows]

I was drawn in by your profile image :). I'm not the best reviewer of poetry, so when you get some stories posted let me know!

As for this piece, there are a few problems with meter, so I never felt as thought the poem came together into one formal "beat," but that could have been done on purpose (see, I never know what the author intended with poetry... haha), but for me, it was a bit distracting.

But I loved the inner angst. I think each of us has to determine who we are and where we fit in, and all of us conform to societies standards to some degree or another - but I know how the subject of this poem must have felt. The fact that you could convey this emotion is a great gift. Bravo.

[Phil Sanders]

Nicely written .. welcome ... Phil