Prayer for you

Homework of my student

       

                               Prayer for You

 

 

Neither Smartness nor Handsomeness

It was your Soberness & Innocence

Your true & genuine reflection

Which sought my attention

 

From the first beam of the day

To the last sunset ray

With all the seasons of the year

I wish to see you Happy dear

 

           

                                 For all the endless tears that I have shed

Making Justice to all the Trials being led

I strive to see that smile on your face

Working earnestly with Patience & grace

 

The sweet world in which we both live

Nothing shall I take but more I will give

Today, you know.. Love is  loosing its Chastity

But, we will prove its virtue & integrity

 

Arguments & Quarrels ain’t a big deal

Cannot be a reason for relationship to seal

Honey, this is every couple’s tale

It is through sufferings our destiny will smoothly sail.

 

I know disputes let you down

But, never let your facet frown

I won’t do things that annoy you

I shall be that “Peace” standing besides you

 

No matter how hard time could be

A gentle promise... that I make should be

I shall Always stand along with you

Because….

My Love is my Prayer for you….!

Author's Note

Well this is not my type of writing. My student approached me. She asked me to write a poem for her boyfriend & told me the subject concern. I have just tried to be a good teacher. I have tried giving it a high school love look.

I feel pressurized when someone dictates me the subject. I feel I do injustice to the subject through words. I guess the best out of me comes when I believe in a subject, live that emotion, Don't mask it & portray it well ...

That's it.

Reviews

[Realm of Thoughts]

May God bless the pair. Nice write by the way. Liked it.

[Mary Christabel George]

Thanks Matthew

[Cassie]

This is a very beautiful prayer, more like a promise. I love the way you have put it together, I enjoyed reading it so much.

[Mary Christabel George]

Thanks for the read & a lovable review Cassie........ God bless u...!

[1 Deep]

The first two stanzas are my favorite. I think it gets a little much for a high school love poem, but not a bad write overall.

[Mary Christabel George]

Hee..Hee..:)
Thank you so much dear.

[Rahul]

This's nicely penned, i liked this piece and so much power of love you have, great write and love's what for someone you visualized here.
great job, allstanzas're my fav. one but the first one's awesome.

[Mary Christabel George]

A lovable person can only understand the emotion of Love ;)
Hee..Hee...;)
Thank you so much Rahul...

[Will]

I think you channel an angst filled teenage love story very nicely. The emotion behind this is evident, and I think your student should be very pleased with what you've produced. Of all the great parts, this was by far my favorite:

"Today, you know.. Love is loosing its Chastity
But, we will prove its virtue & integrity"

This says so much about not just the individual love story told here, but also of the status of our society in general. Great piece, Mary! :)

[Mary Christabel George]

You can just read between the lines.
I am so grateful to you for your review.
It always boost my morale to write.
And I am happy my student too liked it.
She thinks I am her best teacher & counseller.

[Will]

That's all that really matters then :)

[Baby Ricochet]

A very fine dedication to love. Nicely penned

[Mary Christabel George]

Thank you Baby...

[Gaurav Walia]

It has an awesome ryhming scheme...I love it nd th heebie-jeebies on my skin proves it...Well written hon. God Bless

[Mary Christabel George]

Your review is as interesting as you.
Thanks Gaurav.

[Gaurav Walia]

You're quite welcome my dear...

[CreativeCookie]

Okay, the only things I saw were grammatical errors. I'm going to put the bits of the poem down here, capitalize the words that are incorrect, and put the corrected word next to it in parentheses.

"Which SEEKED (sought) my attention"

"But, together (we) will prove its virtue & integrity"

"I won’t do things that ANNOYS (annoy) you"

That's all I've got to critique! Keep it up!
Love,
CreativeCookie

[Mary Christabel George]

Had you not been here... I wonder how would I improve???
Thanks a lot.
I will make changes & keep this in my collections.