The blade

My only way of comfort

is with a tiny piece of metal

leaveing marks on my skin

makes me realize that im still here

 

Nobody bothers to notice

the blood stains on my seleve

It felt so cold and comfoting

when the blade dug through my skin

 

I just want to go

Never held back

let me do the final cut

and let me be free

 

Nobody would care if i was gone

but 1 or 2 people

it will be easier for them

if i was gone

 

I sometimes wonder

if people accually care

or if they feel sorry

or want me dead

 

This is a true tale

of how i feel

when the piece of metal

is digging into my skin

 

Sometimes

I wnat

to end it all

...

..

.

 

 

Reviews

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Wow!! This is soo dark, deep, and scary! Cutting seems to be the answer to a lot of people, but it really doesn't help. Since it just leaves scars that will stay there forever to remind you everyday of a mistake. I understand that people do it to relieve their stress. I hope that you still don't feel this way, because it's sad to want to end your life. Great job on expressing your emotions! I found a few minor mistakes. But I know there's someone that truly cares if you were gone! If you ever need someone to talk to or pull you away from ending your life, there's always God. :)

*Leaveing* --leaving
*Seleve*--sleeve
*Comfoting*--comforting
*accually*-Actually
*wnat*--want

Ashley Rivers-- Dream BIG and you'll win BIG:)

[MusicLover]

I was too depressed to care about spelling. It adds to the affect that she is soooo depressed that she doesnt care about what she loves

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Yeah, it makes sense! You don't have to change it, if you don't want to.

[MusicLover]

Im not. It shows that sometinmes people get so depressed that they do not even care about the thing that shapes their life. So they just type and see what happens.

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Yeah, I know what you mean! But I'm the type of person that goes crazy if I misspell anything. Haha.

[Crazy Cat Man]

a brutal and powerful piece. frighttening to want to end one's own life

[Leslie Philibert]

Nightshade got it right, a good poem that needs a bit of work.

[Nightshade]

Your emotions are clearly splayed across your poem in a simple, yet pure, manner - capturing everything in a single moment

Few misspelled words throughout - but not many. Remember to capitalize your 'I's
Also, at the end of the poem, "I what" - the "what" should be a "want."

And remember.... more people care then what you yourself truly believe ;)

[MusicLover]

It was suppose dot be like that. From the girls point of veiw she was too depressed to even care about what she loves

[luv2dream]

Maria! Message me now!!! NOW!!!!!

[MusicLover]

Im fine now. I may have a date on saturday

[luv2dream]

okay, but still message me hun. I don't want you to do anything you'll regret

[MusicLover]

ok. I will

[♥ Kinnixk]

Thank you luv2dream. :) Listen to her maria! *glare*

[MusicLover]

Sorry sis. I was crying and you did not come. You were even in the room

[♥ Kinnixk]

It was a small thing and it wasn't directed entirely at you. Sorry if it sounds brutal, but it was! :/

[afra]

such a deep and dark write ....well done ...hope you are okay

[Aly Jones]

This is really deep and dark. It's beautifully written, and truly captures your emotions very well.

[TheAdamBryant]

Soetimes i wonder myself if the others want me , if they love me , what they feel about me ? I wanna know but i guess i will find out in the future .

[Alexa Tasch]

Wow. This is deep. Remember, people always care. Really great poem, though!