We Are Young

There's no structure, but a lot of good descriptions, and quite a few good lines :) I wrote this just on a whim, so there might be a few mistakes, but I think it's not a bad piece, nevertheless :)

We are young.

Death is just a faraway thought

Illness is overcome with ease.

Physically,emotionally,

well.

 

Yet we are scared.

Scared to venture into the places of the unknown.

Scared to show the world who we really are.

 

Wating for someone else to take the lead.

We are young.

It is our time

to stand

and scream

our proclamations to the world around us.

 

It's time to dig into your soul

and rip it out into the open,

staring in the faces of criticism and rejection.

 

It's time to break out of our cages,

 

Turn up your music as loud as you can

and dance like noone cares.

 

Stare at yourself in the mirror.

Lose yourself in your own eyes.

Be O.K. with the person blinking back at you.

 

Don't pay attention to your parents

when they warn you

Learn things for yourself.

Make your own mistakes.

 

Imperfection

is our best quality.

 

It's time

to

break

free.

 

Reviews

[SpokenWord]

When I review I don't review for spelling or grammar mistakes mostly I talk about how the poem made me feel, or what I thought of it's content. I feel poetry should move someone rather it is positively or negatively it should be moving in some way.

Your generation is of course so much different than mine, everything my generation fault for your generation now enjoys and has and is taking it even further. We are no longer carbon copies of leave it to beaver re-runs we are evolving into individuals that can come together as one but we can also operate as our self. I like your generations individuality and your purpose to not confirm to traditions that exclude more than they include. You are the realization of Dr. Martin Luther Kings Jr. speech "I have a dream" It is in your generation that see this dream has become reality. Many other generations fear your generation because they think you are too far to the left but I am proud you young men and women for it is you who will make a difference in this country that will be felt around the world.

It is time to break free and be who you are as well as to bring change to registered establishment who thinks they rule us because they feel we are stupid. This is what your poem made me think about now you can understand why I will end by saying that I enjoyed your thoughts, your words, idea's and spirit. This poem is good!

[MoriartyMesa]

Sweet Georgia Peach I feel old.

[LittleMissSunshine :)]

Why is that?

[Gilad Levanon]

Some powerful advice. One might think at face value that this piece has little poetic value. It's not really descriptive or rhythmic and doesn't appear to exhibit any real skill in the writing of it. One might go as far as to say it's not very 'poetic' in any way. Personally, I think that's part of the brilliance of it. The eloquence of this poem lies not in verbosely colourful poetry but in the power of the openness and truth of the message. "Imperfection is our best quality" and incidentally it's also this poem's best quality. The message of the poem, which is a beautiful and inspiring one, is echoed in the poem's lyrical structure or lack thereof. In other words, this piece is literally a call 'to break out of our cages' while the poem itself breaks out of its' own cage. Inspiring stuff.

[An owl on the moon]

Seems like such a strong anthem, the ups and down of youth, growing up in an imperfect world and embracing joys and fears alike. Yes, the world is there too.. time to break free.

[Lucy-Mia]

I like this poem, it is very honest and reminds me of when I left college and didn't know what to do with my life. its a tough time being young, of course I still am, but I am 27 now, and that time of my life feels like a million years ago. thank you for taking me on a trip down memory lane.