Space: The Final Frontier

Space: The Final Frontier

My girlfriend has an advanced
degree in engineering and biological science.
Has at least 1,000 hours of pilot-in-command
time in a jet aircraft.
She passed the NASA space physical
which is similar to a military flight physical
with flying colors, top of her class.
She wants to be an astronaut.

So proud of her.

So you should understand my confusion
when she said she needed some space...
So I asked which planet does she think I should travel to.
By the time I explore the galaxies and return
to earth, maybe your logic will return too.


Because It seems your mind at some point in time
traveled outer-space and returned with an a*s-to-kiss attitude
and asteroid fragments, lodging up brain portals
amongst other things that back in the old fashion days
would've remained lodged up to marriage.
But this is 2010.
Wedding rings have been replaced with baby carriages as a symbol of unity. You said your girlfriends nicknamed it the "lay-a-away marriage".


I listened to your autobiography.

First heart broken in '98, then 2003 repeated history.
You said hearing R. Kelly's song, "one man can make one woman hate all men." recycling on the right side of your brain made you start to reject me. But your left side responding with Kem's, "there's nowhere to run when love is calling you're name" was the only thing that kept me in your company.


The irony is, those songs each debuted in those very years mentioned
yet its 2010 and I can't think of one current love song to symbolize our history. We are not on cloud 9, hell we're still on cloud 2 using binoculars to locate 3.
"You're sexy when you're mad." Says who?
Cause busting the windows outta MY 2005 Camry
sure ain't the hell sexy to me.

I wish Luther was around to drop another album. That would make it so easy. So we depend on the Maxwell's, Lalah Hathaway's,
and Stevie Wonders of the world to fill those spaces, but I still wonder
when I come back to this planet will there still be space in your world for me?

I was almost on her side, understanding and feeling some empathy.
Oh but those tables turned like DJ Rich Medina when you
had the nerve to say that I couldn't stimulate you
enough intellectually.
And that you needed a man who could
move thru your private seas like Poseidon.
Sexual healing like Asclepius.
Have the sensitivity, and the poetic mind of Apollo.
And Last but not least, mentality and ambiance of Zeus.
Well space cadet, I have bad news for you.
The closest you'll ever get to getting sandwiched by two Greeks is between South st. and 40th and Spruce.


Book smarts does not mean you'll have any common sense or any spiritual intelligence.
Let's get serious cause back in college when your books failed you
and your insecurities weren't secure in you, you called me
and we prayed to Professor Jesus to get you through.

So let's not research the god's or whatever galaxy
you currently live in for resolutions to small problems.
The answers always laid right here in our small community.
But you've made your choice and I respect your voice
although this decision makes no sense to me.

Go find your mythical man because I'm cutting all ties.
Yeah you may be a Mrs. Smartypants but
you'll never be a Ms. Wise.
You don't have to convince me
this is all being done for the right reasons.
I hear you when you say my love can never be replaced.
I trust you words because good men and women like us never lie.
Besides, there aren't too many men out there big enough to fill MY space.

Reviews

[Kristin Brecoe]

i really liked this piece. the theme was handled skillfully and poetically. you seem like a smart guy. how could any girl think differently.

im impressed. im not into reading such long pieces like this because i either barely have the time to finish it or the writer bores me before i even get half way through.

i dont know how you take constructive criticismand whether or not you'd appreciate me being a bit picky. so let me know, and i'd be glad to help.

by the way, i think my favorite part may be the stanza with professor jesus. despite the fact that i dont really believe in a god, it still made me smile.

i think im going to go read more of your work.

[Clarisse Nanoit]

"I listened your autobiography." listened TO, perhaps?

"'You're sexy when your mad.'" you're*

"So let's not search the God's" gods


LOVED this piece! Very good. I wanna read it over and over. Definitely have to request it to some friends. The recurring theme of space was so cool, and it was used craftily. Very nice. You're an amazing writer...
KH

[Adam Greenfield]

Damn, Marquise. This was fantastic. It was poetic conversation and had direction and strength and was full of bravado. If this truly happened that sucks but it still shows an emotional and mental strength that must have got you through the situation. Stellar write and even better read.

[Jaffa Forbes]

really love it, great poem. found it hard sometimes to find the rhythm perhaps just because of the way it was written, but there doesn't always have to be one. i love the way that it's funny and yet sad in some ways as well... there aren't many poems like that out there. good stuff, keep well.
Jaff

[bre]

I usually dread reading long poems, and drop out after the first or second stanza but your first two stanzas kept me reading.

I found parts of this poem quite humorous for example the part about how she doesn't look sexy when she's mad, because lets face it when a woman is mad and screaming in your face (maybe even busting the windows out of your car) she's everything but sexy.

I can relate to parts of the poem as well. the stanza where you talked about her going through school and she called you to be there for her, but after all of that she became "Mrs. Smartypants"---to her you may have been good enough then, but not now.

the situation sucks, but you got a great write.

bre

[Alyssa]

I thought this was well written and versed. I love the line play and the flow. Great job and keep writing.

[Practically Enchanted]

I love your writing style. I love some of your lines. Like you'll never be Mrs. Wise and your reference to lay a way marriage! Great job.

[Platus]

engaging

[Kate Franta]

I enjoy the freedom you've taken as far as the line lengths, it feels (as the reader) like we're expanding and contracting like the space you're talking about.

Love the connection between the Greek gods and the celestial bodies. I felt the power in these lines, though not outright anger.

Have to say my favorite stanzas are the 3rd and 7th ("move through your private seas like Poseidon" is particularly descriptive). I look forward to reading more of your writing.

[QuietPoet]

This was very interesting. You had a lot of meaning in this write. I felt the emotion. Nicely done.